Reviews for Your Past
Vernelley chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
Ah, this is really good!

Makes you think about things you've done in the past and the guilt that still haunts you. I'm sorry about my short reviews, by the way, I'm not very wordy.
Rock Happens chapter 1 . 2/1/2010
Hey!

Technical issues:

"It[']s too complicated"

"It[']s ready to be heard"

I like the repition and there is a good use of the senses. Overall, a good job :D

Rock
Lee Daniel chapter 1 . 1/21/2010
I am quickly becoming addicted to your work. Everything you write touches deep inside me and triggers an emotional response. Secrets that burn and torment from past actions are something known to me. Both my own secrets and those of others. Reading this brings a fresh wave of guilt for even the secrets I have revealed. I am almost afraid to read any more of your work, and yet I cannot help but search for the next way in which you have looked inside my very soul. Incredible.
Edensong chapter 1 . 10/27/2008
Very strong piece. "Shadows linger where sin stained" was a powerful line. Just watch for small mistakes like "Satin" instead of "Satan", it tends to change the context. Keep writing!