I like how it flows

So that when they dissipate,

The stars glimmer all the more brightly

On the surface of your memories.

It is short but the message is delivered. Nice.

I usually prefer pieces that are a little longer, but I think that the length coupled with your choice of words are very good here. Nice work with this piece.

Hmm I thought it was good.

the last two lines were my favorite :)

oh and no need to review one of mine

im on a review spree :P

this almost sounds like a poem i've read before. Good flow and nice vocab choices.

I dont expect a review back, but i wanted to say I really do like the last two lines! it sounds pretty... :)