ah! that was good! AND VERY SCARY THANKS FOR THE NIGHTMARES THAT ARE GOING TO COME! :) ;) i really liked it - especially the imagery of the firey orb that the ghost pulled from kirsty's (i think it was her) heart! it was soo cool, I never could have come up with that! :)

just one thing you need to work on: the transition between the party and the graveyard was a little awkward with the line that was like, "i don't believe that, but let's go there anyways!" - it's kind of vague...maybe fix that transition. :)

overall, i was very impressed, especially by your descriptions and the phrases and sentence structures that you used! good job and keep on writing! :)

well, because this is so good, I am going to pick on nits.

"The grave digger was silent as he... Damon noticed how pale the grave

digger was;"

why is there a whole line between both of those patches of 1 paragraph?

also you might concider to make mister grave guy into Mister Grave Guy

for the end, it seems just that you would have the boy have two extra unfilled graves to be filled and then as soon as they understand, pop 'em in and kill 'em

otherwise, pretty good