|Reviews for Tenebrism|
| Charnette chapter 11 . 4/4/2015
An awesome story, I was so into this it took me a while to get over the fact there was no "next" button to take me to the next chapter.. oh, the grief.
Anyway, the dialogue of the characters flows very naturally and the chapters are nicely lenghty, which allowed me to really lose myself in all of it (oh, and did I ever). The world you've built around your characters is indeed interesting, can't wait to read what happens next! :)
| Nunya chapter 1 . 4/2/2015
I mean /seriously/.
You taken what could have been a good book with weird supernatural beings and culture, and then you morph it into a straight-gay journey for our protagonist.
He's college age. He's not homophobic. It's the United States in the 21st century. The chances that he's discovering a whole new side to his sexuality, or that he's "coming out of the closet" and didn't even know he was in it. /The chances of it/. They're astronomically low. And then he starts discovering it with an alien-thing? And we're already dealing with astronomically low probabilities with the whole statue/alien thing happening. Too many unlikely coincidences.
If he'd started out gay, this could have been a good book. I WANTED it to be a good book. I really, really did. But I started reading this book on the assumption that the /slash/ would be background to the adventure, and that both characters would be, you know, actually gay.
Instead it turned an "Adventure" into a 'gasp, I like boys, wait that doesn't make sense, but his lips *eyelid flutter*' where neither character is even aware of their feelings. But it still gets more screen time and more in depth writing than anything else.
Next time put "Angst" or "Romance" or "Drama" as the first code. The only adventure here is an overly dramatic and stupidly angsty adventure of human sexuality. This is not how people discover they're gay/bisexual.
Just because 99% of the stories on this site involve men desperately trying to fuck each other, but are cock-blocked by angst and plot devices, doesn't mean that has to be what your story was about. Why, they could have been fucking each other since day two! The dramatic build to the pinnacle of sex could have been the dramatic build to the resolution of conflict! Oh well.
Good luck in the future.
| Atenea217 chapter 11 . 3/5/2015
Hey there! I'm so glad you updated! I love this whole story so much. And I just adore Alan, he's an awesome character, so full of personality. You actually manage to always create amazing characters that I just can't help but love. Keyd, Rysa, Kir... all of them.
I'd like to know the name of the story you're publishing so I can look it up.
And I really wish you would publish the whole Light and Shadow series; I'd totally buy it. Seriously, I'd love having this story in my shelf. It's such a wonderful and magical story!
Thanks for sharing!
P.D: I also hope you'll publish some more about Saul and Vaun. God, I really want to read about Saul visiting Vaun's house :)
| freewalker22 chapter 11 . 3/3/2015
That was incredible,I loved every moment of it. So very vivid. Thank you!
| CanaryChirp chapter 11 . 3/3/2015
YAAAAAY I'M SO HAPPY THIS GOT UPDATED I LOVED IT SO MUCH I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS EVER SINCE I FIRST STARTED READING THESE I LOVE THIS STORY I'M SO FREAKING HAPPY THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU YAAAAAAY
| SmileyfaceGurl chapter 11 . 3/2/2015
This chapter gave me liiiiiiife!
Ehm, That is all.
| KunLun chapter 11 . 3/2/2015
AAAA I'm so excited!
I think Rysa should carry Law off into the unknown because he is indeed a sweaty ballsac.
I also hope that Alan absolutely decimated Ahieel and he is dead but, I sort of doubt that since... Well, I just didn't expect the 'weak' protagonist to be able to do more than two warrior aliens, right...
| Ney13 chapter 11 . 3/2/2015
Ugh, I just want a super hot smex scene! With all the freaking tension between them, it'll be on fire!
| Collins-A chapter 11 . 3/2/2015
Oh my god did he DISINTEGRATE him?! Badaaassss omlawd
| phoenixlight chapter 10 . 12/29/2014
| chiakaiyuki chapter 10 . 11/20/2014
Loving the story so far! You are a fantastic writer and I can't wait to read more. :D
| A Dreamer Always chapter 10 . 10/26/2014
Wow. It took me all day but I've been reading this story for about 8hrs now and I am REALLY ready for what happens next. Next time I can, I'll contribute to your Patreon page, I promise. I hope you feel better soon :)
| ArthurAlbionKirkland chapter 10 . 10/25/2014
YES YES YES
So glad I checked my FictionPress today.
I'm sorry to hear that your health isn't the best, and I hope you get better as fast as possible. Alas, I am a poor poor college student and need to be fiercely budgeted, elsewise I would def help out.
| Guest chapter 10 . 9/30/2014
Oh my god I FREakig love this story
| Addiena Saffir chapter 10 . 9/3/2014
So great to see an update on this story. Great Chapter I cannot wait for this to be done so I can read part two.