I really like how this was coming out. I hope you keep going with it, though it's been quite some time since you've updated it on here at least.

Considering this is your first fantasy and faerie story, I would say you're doing a pretty good job with it. Your explanation for certain things like the small happiness faeries make is really cool. I hope to read more soon. :)

P.S.(this is Jacqui btw :])

You.

You need to continue this.

It is very good, and I can't let you leave it at this!

haha!

I know its been forever, but

please, continue this story!

“They’re responsible for our secrecy, safety. And the town parties, but that has nothing to do with this

PARTAH

you better update this soon.

my dragon is looking pretty hungry.

i think i'll roast you at the stake and feed you too him . . . medium rare. . . still kickin'

so get to work girly. ;p

(i'd never hurt ya love)

As soon as we said our goodbyes I made a very hasty beeline to the bathroom. Mason didn’t follow me in until he heard me vomiting. He slammed the stall door open, making me practically fall head-first into the toilet out of shock, and forced himself down next to me and held back my hair

Is it bad I was cracking up here? Well I was also painting my nails. Fumes? Or is it really as funny as it seemed to me?

wonderful chapter! :)

aw.

i still haven't read my book. damn school work. remind me to renew them please. :D

“Thank you, Croc Hunter,” I said sarcastically as I straightened my top. I turned to him and asked: “How do I look?” apprehensively.

“Great, now go get her,” he said determinedly.

Aha. Ahaha. Ahahahaha ! I was cracking up at this. : D

Oh man. I thought Emily and her had a chance, as soon as she said blonde hair and tan I snapped my fingers and added an OH NO SISTER.

He pointed out my open window. I slowly turned and looked. Next to my car was a truck with two men sitting in the front. They were staring at me like I was crazy and I was talking to myself. I thought quick and picked up my phone from the cup holder and held it up and said “Speaker phone” and laughed. The guys weren’t convinced and still looked at me strangely. Luckily, the light changed and I was able to floor it out of the situation

That sounds like something we have done. either that or we just play hanson and sing at the top of our lungs. : D

can you explain to me more about the green fairies eating the bright ones? sounds terrifying!

i love love love this story, and hope there are many chapters to come!

dang, if having a fairy friend is that much trouble i'll pass on that. oh anddon't worry you'll get all the required chapters in because you rock.

peace love happiness

man i wish i had an imaganary friend somtimes. it would make me feel better when i'm home alone talking to myself. (i hope that dosn't make me sound crazy cause i'm not, just really lonely.) love the story. keep up the great work.

peace love happiness

Aw. She really likes Mason.

I found one mistake in this chapter:

“The she won’t go to college. Plenty of kids aren’t and they’re getting alright jobs,”

'The' should be 'Then.'

I like how childlike Mason is. It's funny, it reminds me of Elf.

Mason's ignorance of human grown up traditions is funny. When he asked her what games do grown ups play, I couldn't help but laugh. This story is cute, I like it.

I really like this story. I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors, so that's good. Your use of detail is very good, it wasn't over the top and added to the story rather than lessened it.

This is a wonderful story. I like how you used the concept of fairies. I love fairies, but most stories about them are so overdone. Your concept is so original. I want Mason to come back so bad! I miss him already. Oh, and god luck for NaNoWriMo.

WRITE MORE DAMN IT. *shakes fist* I NEEDS IT! *goes all Gollum on your ass* Precious.

yay! another chapter..i love it :)

cant wait till the next chapter

Tallie