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shadow-of-a-trackless-sea chapter 1 . 3/2/2009
sorry i haven't been on in a while, but i like this piece. i thought it was interesting how you used "chards" it's always nice to see varying word usage.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/22/2008
"and a heart/beliefs".. I felt like you needed a comma between those two lines

"and the man no longer/exist at all."... men exist, man exists

I really like the piece. The descriptions are very interesting and I love the simile about the mosaic and sketch. Its really different and great. I also liked your line breaks. The only thing is it got a bit repetitious, but other than that nice job.

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koda bear chapter 1 . 11/2/2008
this is interesting...it makes me want to read dit over and over agian to fully understand it. the mosiac and shards of glass that is very in depth and unique it cathces your attention. very different solid piece of writing-good job