Reviews for Sweet Oblivion |
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![]() ![]() Omfg. Why are there no more chapters!? |
![]() ![]() Good suspense- don't wait to write next ch- some of us are hanging on |
![]() ![]() i wonder what will happen next |
![]() ![]() ![]() er... it was really good in the begining. The end of this chapter was fine as well. But I kind of lost my interest in it with the vamp thing. if that is what's going on here. :( |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome chapter, sorry I'm just reading it now, but I've been busy. I loved it and Update SOON! -Kia |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw :) This was one of the best chapters. :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice story you've got going here. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I'm quite interested in what's going to happen now between Ryley and Ian so do please update soon. _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not a bad chapter. I'm looking forward to the next one to see if she gets to meet Ian again. Hopefully all goes well for her. _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow a lot happened here, but I'm so glad Ian's back in Ryley's dreams, I was beginning to worry it would never happen again. Anyway, this as in them being together in the chapter was so heartfelt. I kinda feel sorry for Ian cause he honestly believes that Ryley will run away from him if she found out who he was. Moving on :D, loved the chapter and still loving the story, glad you updated :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved that chapter. Ian is so freaking sweet! He makes me all giddy and warm and fuzzy inside. There are only a few character ive ever read about make me feel that way, and ian makes me feel that way. lmao. oh, n i was afraid this would be some stupid twilight ripoff amd im so glad its not! ill review often as possible. cant wait for the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really really good. I love the dreams. Dreams are such a cool thing to write about, and you did it perfectly :) I must say, I adore the way that you make the ordinary seem extraordinary, and little things seem really amazing, its a great talent to have. Like how you wrote about the listening so hard, thing, that you cant think anything else. Its perfectly written. I havent really even picked up any mistakes. Great work, your welcome, everything Ive said is true :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, last review I forgot to comment on the fact that your intial introduction was amazing. Like the best I had read since god knows when, like actually, so many real books dont have as good of a begining paragraph as this story did. Your language and the structure of your sentences is all perfect, adn well synchronised. I love the fact that you started the whole thing with a characters death. I love that whole concept ae :O The thought that you have put into every last sentence is amazing, and its just the perfect coming together of assumptions made by the character and facts that are actually reality in the story. And your messages behind the words are also very good, plus it is overbrimming with emotion. Your writing is crazily good, and even though I've only read like two chapters, I can already see you have a real talent. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, at first I coundnt work it out. Like, after the bit that said... Ian- But then I realised that it was a PoV change, and it was all cool :) That was a really great, really intrueging first chapter, I really loved it. I think sometimes the intial chapter has to be short and snappy to hook the readers in. I really loved this beginning :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow. poor ian and riley, they just can't cut a break can they? awesome chapter, and i can't wait for the next one! |
![]() ![]() ![]() PLEASE update soon. This is one of my favorite sories and i look forward to a new chapter! you are doing an amazing job and dont let anyone tell you otherwise |