|Reviews for One more day|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/30/2008
"I've heard things I wannan't/(get out are you serious?)"... I don't get what you mean by wannan't, did you mean I didn't wanna? Also that seems really slangy and out of place.
The chorus confused me a bit just what it was trying to say, but I did like the rest of it. It was really relateable and sad.
| May Elizabeth chapter 1 . 11/15/2008
I think everyone is like this. lol Peace.
| Isca chapter 1 . 11/6/2008
"I can sleep quietly." Beautiful imagery. It's also very powerful because it connects back to the line before it about not feeling guilty.
"Sorry for being an accident." Wow! That was emotionally intense! It's like a slap in the face (that's a good things haha). :)!
| Erlkoenigin chapter 1 . 11/6/2008
A very impressive poem. The repetitions produce incantatory effects. You could have posted it as “love”?