final review-9/10

Very cool. Zombies are always awesome. Don't know if your an Evil Dead fan but I worship it so I enjoyed 'Ash'.

One thing, I think I caught a typo: 'Forte wrinkled is nose in distaste.' 'is' is probably supposed to be 'his' isn't it?

That's all I noticed in terms of mistakes. Good job.

I liked the story it was original. continue on with the military base, and with the other charecters

My, I wonder how this story came about. I feel bad for Page, that poor kid. I mean, he ate Ash's phone, and then he got his head blown off...and then his stomach was sifted through.

Oh, and I guess he was a zombie at the time too, right?

Forte is my favorite character. So cool, such a wiseass, and he's just so amazing. I wish I could grow up to be like him someday!

Well, Ash is kinda cool too. I guess.

*ties his hands behind him and gets down on his knees* I know what's coming. :3