Reviews for A Silent Violin
Guy1122 chapter 1 . 11/18/2008
I'm going to have to agree with the past reviews. It was a very nice song, but you really don't have to force the rhyme like that. Not all songs/poems rhyme.

Just keep the rhythm going.

Very nice job though.
Thornprick chapter 1 . 11/15/2008
it's so pretty...and sad, very sad :)! i love it!
Take Another Look chapter 1 . 11/14/2008
I like it! :D

I just had some small tips:

I wouldn't depend so heavily on the rhyming scheme, you can if you want to, but I would say only if it really works and sounds right. There was one verse where you had words with "tion" at the end of every line, which just sounded kind of odd. It's mainly just the bridge that sounds weird. Fix that and you'll be good to go!

Another note, I feel like some of the words that you got from the rhyming dictionary just don't really fit in, and there's some that if altered a bit would fit in really well. The main one that confused me was hydration in the chorus. Maybe you meant dehydration? I really like the chorus though :D

Ducky
ImaginationIsEverything chapter 1 . 11/14/2008
Really pretty song! I could picture Evanescence singing it. It has a really eerie sound to it, when you play it in your head... :-)