|Reviews for Lake County|
| clockwork kiss chapter 1 . 12/4/2008
i love the concrete imagery and proper nouns in this poem. gives me a real place and image in my head. i also like the speaker's voice and tone... it's personal and young and real. however, it's hard for me to follow exactly what's going on in here. i get it's about southern suicides, but i don't understand the exact plot or why you thought of killing him. why is the casperson kid going door to door, and where are is your friend going to visit? the cemetary? just a couple of lines or words could help clear this up a little. i'm really interested in your story and i love your imagery, so it's a good thing i want to know more! :) -mindy.