|Reviews for Click|
| Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
This has quite a bit of energy! Like a complicated dance.
| Fabian Cortez chapter 1 . 4/30/2012
Wonderful. Nothing more needs to be said here.
| Archia chapter 1 . 1/1/2012
I really enjoyed the description. To be honest, I wouldn't have guessed it was rain until you said it, and I'm not sure if I like it more now that I know. It makes more sense, but then, before I could let my imagination conjure up something. "Particles separating and
colliding for the sole purpose
of creating something beautiful," I love those three lines so much.
| Michael Kelso chapter 1 . 3/20/2011
I like it to the left, it looks like it's growing. Like you're descending a staircase to something. It makes me wonder how big it would be if you kept going.
| Elennar chapter 1 . 3/29/2010
Wow. This is a great poem that you have here!
My favourite image is the one that the poem starts with- just lovely and very powerful.
I also loved the last two lines.
| lookingwest chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
XD, Okay, so I copied and pasted this review in it's rightful place, if you find time you can by all means delete the oopsie-one in A Goodbye!
I actually liked this a lot for it's short imagist flavor. Would I have known it was referring to rain? No. But, without that background information I liked it for it's desperation and that line "lapse in sanity" really pulls it together for me as sort of a moment of perhaps anger that was un-controlled. I like that idea and you certainly use wonderful words to convey it, "colliding for the sole purpose" and "crushing" and "my hand through glass" all paint that picture and I like those lines because they were your strongest in my opinion.
| Hisa-Ai chapter 1 . 2/13/2010
Wicked, I think that's really cool.
| Mirabella chapter 1 . 12/30/2009
It reminds me of a clock ticking. :)
| Isca chapter 1 . 12/22/2009
I love the way in which "a momentary lapse in sanity" metaphorically connects to the sound of crushing glass. That's very thought-provoking and vivid.
| lipleaf chapter 1 . 12/14/2009
I think your poem is better off to the left. The way the lines slowly grow longer is aesthetically appealing. :) This does indeed seem random, but it was interesting. I like the way you used "created by a momentary lapse in sanity." It insinuates the existence of a higher being, one that enjoys making beautiful things. I'm not sure how to explain it- it kind of seems like a roundabout way of saying our world is beautiful.
| you're sick chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
Haha, very good! The very last line is my favorite. The poem comes in really close into simple things and then broadens to make you realize what you just did. I liked it a lot.
| Saurosuchus chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
I prefer it how you formatted it. this is a very nice poem. I love the imagery of the sound. a bit unique, but very well done.
| LoonyLuna chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
:O I loved it...especially the bit about particles separating and colliding...reminded me of my chemistry classes. Wow..very ambiguous..me like :)
| fatbird33 chapter 1 . 8/20/2009
This is you present for being amazing in the review marathon. yayness!
i think that i like this particular poem to the left. I think it all depends on what the content of the poem is on whether to have it centered or not.
now to the poem itself...
when i first read it i was like 'what?" but then i reread it and it made sense:) it's always good when you can do that i think, make the reader do a double take, it shows that you have mad skills.
I liked your line "crushing together like my hand through glass" ouch. great imagery.
i also liked the word choice of "slendor" it seemed to fit perfectly.
Just one grammar thing: I think that there should be a comma between the first and second lines. It would flow better that way.
Overall great peice of poetry.
| Imminent Paradox chapter 1 . 7/12/2009
Wow... that is REALLY good... It's hard to explain. But it's definitely a lovely piece. I had to read it over a few times, just so I could try and wrap my head around it. Very nice :) Amazing job!