Nothing in this storyline is good. Too fake to even finish reading the whole thing.

Nevertheless, my main concern is Mallory accepting the kiss as what she thinks or wants to do in that moment is useless according to her thoughts. What are you telling the girls out there? That it’s okay to go along for the girls when someone is forcing them rather than for the boy to accept a no means no? Urgh!

Great Oneshot, some translations though? We don't all know French

WTF I feel sorry for her, for welcome him back in her life that easy, she should have moved on and be happy with somebody that won't dump her on the first year of their marriage, because you know, they only last for that period of time... Seriously, this story leaves the women with a bad reputation, like c'mon he's an asshole and that's it, she deserves something more and he doesn't deserve her, period.

It's nice :) I got nosebleed with the French LOL.

It may be the most you've ever written, but how much of that could non-speaking french audience members understand without translating the words? You should have just used less French and more English phrases so that there could be more meaning.

The whole plot line was outlined, yet it wasn't a strong piece. The emotions being expressed within the dialogue weren't down to 100% or 60% for that case.

I think if you go back and fix up your story, it could be soooooo much better than it is now.

Treasures always need to be trashed, right?

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Don't take this review to heart. It's the Internet, we know each other behind false names and care naught for the other. :)

I love this story! It's really good but I think that you should have the English translations for when they speak French. Anyways, this is a lovely story.

I kinda liked it, except I didn't understand the French and I was too lazy to put it into a translator so I just guessed what was being said. Ehh, it wasn't the best I've read-a little too predictable but pretty well written overall. It was still a good story.

I think it's pretty hilarious how he keeps asking her if she's okay and is something wrong when it clearly says 'I'm crying' or 'crying even harder'. Sorry just found it funny. And I loved it btw

OH MY GOD!

Never mind, too cliche and fake.

Anyway, I read this story some time last year, and I still remember it. That means it made a huge impact because I have read 10 stories.

I remembered it after thinking about good oneshots that I wanted to re-read, and this was at the top of my list.

However, I couldn't find it for SO LONG (three months?) and that was too long for me.

After agonizing hours of searching, I found it. I LOVE THIS STORY.

-truebleu

P.S. Sorry for being such a drama queen.

I didn't like it.

It was too fake.

You are an excellent writer, this was just too rushed for me.

And I really hated Aiden, his reasons for breaking up with Mallory didn't make sense and them getting back together in just a few minutes after all those years and after he broke her heart...

And then him asking her to marry him?

That would never happen in real life.

All I think when I read this is "Too fake!"

So cute. I love it lots :D please write more :D

my ave art has to be the haunted house and the proposal

i love Aiden! the story was sweet and well written (even though i only understood about of the stuff in french)

charlotte

omg. that's such a cute short story.

Lady, what is WRONG with you...? All those French words and not a single translation... Sighs. I'll just have to use my imagination. ;)