Reviews for Emotions
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/30/2008
You change tenses quite a bit here. I would work on that. Otherwise it's an interesting piece. Very relateable and understandable, but the descriptions are different, which is nice. I honestly, don't really like that last stanza. I would leave it just as the first part (less repetitive), but maybe that's just me.
Seven Rose chapter 1 . 11/23/2008

There were some parts I liked,

"It has come to my heart,

To the very deep core:

Knocking at my door.

What should I do?"

was very nice.

I was very confused about the dragon though.

At first it's inside, then it is knocking at your door to go in?