|Reviews for Perfection|
| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 11/23/2008
[Perfection comes pain.] It seems like you're missing a word here. Maybe "Perfection brings pain" or "with perfection comes pain."
Anyway, your rhyme and rhythm are very good. They are very precise, which fits the topic well.
On the opposite end: [And remain faultless.] I liked the contrast in this because it creates a "fault;" a contrast to the rest of it.
You managed to convey a lot with four lines. Nice work :)
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| Imperia chapter 1 . 11/23/2008
I agree with your message. this is short and to the point and so true. i really like this and i think it is a great start..consider expanding on it? :)