Reviews for Twice
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 12/6/2008
The only thing is with the line lengths like that and the lack of imagery, it seems more like a piece of prose than a poem. But still it's a great story. Definitely something people can relate to and it has a nice message. The repetition works well too.
pale doll chapter 1 . 11/24/2008
God, I can relate so much to this poem! Only I've done it three times. I hope that you are still not with this awful boy, if you are please get away from him. I am so glad you're back on fictionpress and I can't wait to read more new stuff from you!
Eilinora chapter 1 . 11/23/2008
Oh, come on, all you little girls love it when men treat you like shit. Stop pretending that you aren't a blemish and a barricade to the real and worthy females of this age.
Alexandria Smith chapter 1 . 11/23/2008
maybe you love the wrong person.

well, this was a really good piece to pick to read in front of everyone because it does ring clarity with lots of powerful emotions and lines.

I really enjoyed this.

good job.

~Alexandria Smith
queenvixta chapter 1 . 11/23/2008
Awesome poem, I really enjoyed it. You're right, you do deserve better.

It's great to see you back on FP again. Your work is as great as ever.

Well done with this!