Oh my word! I absolutely loved it! You had me captivated from the very first word all the way to... well, know. The entire layout, the grammar, your vocabulary, the story, everything was perfect! It takes a true author to make words not only rhyme but have a profound meaning as well. This was great and you should definitely keep writing around this area.

Oh and if you ever put this thing to music and get it out in the open, I want to know because I will be the first in line to buy it. :)