|Reviews for Return|
| WishBlade chapter 1 . 1/3/2011
This is an absolutely beautiful piece-loved it like crazy ]
| barelyamiable chapter 1 . 11/29/2009
I really love this.
I think my favourite line in all of this was "You're scared. You are scared." Just because it heightened that moment so well. And you perfectly avoided the awkwardness of the "you are" and made it sound so much more natural.
And more on wonderful stylistic choices, I love how you used a third-person limited point of view throughout this, but would alternate between the two characters, too. I just think it was so wonderfully done.
And since I'm just about obsessed with names, I feel the need to point out what unique name choices you made! Morven more than Joel; the latter's just a bit uncommon.
I'm definitely not an athletic person; I do very limited physical activity. But this kind of inspired me.
Love, love, love. :)
| natmarie chapter 1 . 7/20/2009
First, Morven, nice and unique name, somehow it seems to fit a gymnast? Maybe just in my head. I like this piece, it's a simple realization that makes a great plot and relistically captures an athlete's struggles. Nicely done.