Reviews for Mistaken Identity
rainbowjar chapter 1 . 11/29/2008
good story, overall. The idea of a "mistaken identity" in the case of an amnesiac is very intriguing, because... how do they know that they're NOT the murderer? The writing (sentence-wise) was also good, especially the descriptions of the setting. You're very articulate! There did, however, seem to be something missing emotionally in the story. It's very driven by action (the man did this, then this happened), and there's not much emphasis at all on his reactions or what he was feeling. Because the plot is very intense (amnesia, running for his life), I feel that it wouldn't be a bad idea to focus a little more on the man and his thoughts rather than the bare bones of the plot.