Reviews for Mr Maxwell Mekhil
JackInk chapter 2 . 1/17/2009
Each chapter should have someone killed. So you might want to add on to this chapter where Kenny actually gets murdered.
JackInk chapter 1 . 1/14/2009
Wow. This can be the beginning of something really great. It was very interesting and pretty cool, also original which is very important. I hope you stick with this because I can see this get into something really big.

However you might want to get rid of "I picked her up bridal style" and replace it with "I picked her up like she was a bride" It serves the same purpose but flows better.

So in conclusion, stick with this.