Reviews for Divide By Zero
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 12/1/2008
I think the strongest part of this is the last stanza; it has a concrete image to compare the relationship to, and that seems to work better, give a better visual of what's going on. Metaphors are very helpful that way. I'm sure you know that already, but you know, just throwing it out there. I think that's what you're lacking, is some sort of clear picture, images to make the reader see what's happening. I don't know what else to suggest. The title (which I love) does seem to suggest a bit of a mathematical theme, so if you could work in something like that, using algebraic terms or geometric terms? I don't know. Just a suggestion. Keep writing! :)