Reviews for Can and Can't
fivesandsevens chapter 1 . 12/16/2008
Chills down my back.

Tears down my cheecks.

You read the thoughts from my mind

You heard the cries from my heart

You saw the pain of my soul

You transformed it all

Turned them into beautifully sorrowful words

But you have never met me

I have never known you

How can this be?

major-prep-707 chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
I love your style, so to the point and direct. Your work is so raw and true, it's amazing. Keep it up!
deletethisaccountplease9 chapter 1 . 12/4/2008
eh im gonna have to agree, too many commas. I like the formating for emphasis though! very well done. I really hate situations like that. You cant escape unless everything goes either right or wrong.
4tehlessthan3of0scoreintennis chapter 2 . 12/3/2008
no problem! I'm happy to help; it really makes my day, and it just did. ]

I don't think it was overkill with the commas. great job.
Broken Winged Bird chapter 1 . 12/3/2008
Very sad and sweet. It's true, too. There's some people that you can't live with and can't live without at the same time. And i love how you put the letters that spell "Cassie" into the poem and pointed them out. that was a clever trick

i don't think you overused commas, i think it's fine.

And i really like this poem. it's very touching. definitely a fave and C2
pixy dust and fairytales chapter 1 . 12/3/2008
great piece, I really liked it. Very real. I didn't think you over used commas, either. :)

socks-lost chapter 1 . 12/3/2008
I think the comma issue is fine. I didn't even notice it until you pointed it out. I like the concept of the piece. I think its really honest and truthful. I like how you can say so much in such little words. Anyway, awesome! Keep it up!