Reviews for Time Bomb
Arista Everett June chapter 1 . 7/9/2013
Nice! You write so well.

AEJ
Penn Dalies chapter 1 . 4/3/2010
It makes me wonder whether your talking generally, or that like most bombs today-things in our lives explode to make other things explode at a much greater magnitude. Like a ripple effect in the water. One explosion leads to another.
syramay chapter 1 . 10/24/2009
i like it! :)
Mirabella chapter 1 . 7/24/2009
Love it!

Nice comparison, and i like the dot dot dots at the end! Seems continuous, as if the bomb still ticks. :)
bunny.one.three chapter 1 . 7/20/2009
Wow, I agree, life is like a time bomb. You wrote this poem quite well, I like how you play with those words and how meaningful they sound... Nice job.
obscene-teen chapter 1 . 7/15/2009
love this!

it's short, but it really does sum up life completely.

the rhyming scheme was great made it flow very nicely.

and i loved the image of a time bomb sitting on the side of the road and no one notices it until it goes off. (idk, maybe that's not what you were going for, but that's what i pictured haha)

overall, it was great :]
wo bu ai ni le chapter 1 . 6/17/2009
A very good metaphor. That's what makes life beautiful and horrendous xD

I loved the rhyme too, it almost sounds like the ticking of a bomb.

fleur
MyInspiration chapter 1 . 4/21/2009
you for sure can make this longer. the last line especially could be after a bit of a longer poem.

i love the idea, and i love the "undetected...unsuspected" lines but you write "sitting" twice in a row
words.for.you-DLS chapter 1 . 4/4/2009
This is very true. Life is definatly like a time bomb. Nice job!
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 3/24/2009
Very true in alot of ways. The reader can interpret and include their own personal experiences into this because it is broad based and universal. Well written.
tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 3/22/2009
So simple, yet so beautiful.

I don't know how you do it!
ZajblueZz chapter 1 . 2/13/2009
This poem reminded me of some of the things that have gone through my head before. This poem seems to show how life can keep on going, and then, suddenly, everything can blow up in your face. Great job for such a short piece.
drippingdreams chapter 1 . 2/7/2009
This reminds me a little bit of one of my favourite Slam Performance pieces by Katie Wirsing. One of her lines is "some days life feels like a distant version of tick tick boom."

I especially like the image of life sitting on the side of the road. I can imagine it, sort of edgy and sullen, crumpled hoodie, biding...

Thanks for the R/R!
TheBeautyOfTheGrave chapter 1 . 2/5/2009
So true.

Holli
Narq chapter 1 . 2/1/2009
ooh creepy, effective... and BOOM!

lol I really liked it!

Narq.
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