|Reviews for The Inexplicable State of Being There|
| Guest chapter 20 . 6/21/2016
I like your story!
| intercostalspace chapter 1 . 5/29/2016
great first chapter!
| Colie Rae chapter 20 . 5/18/2016
Love the story. It had original aspects and I felt the ups and downs were believable. I enjoyed the point of view switches. The main characters were well developed. Great story!
| noaccount chapter 19 . 4/21/2016
I'm sorry to add on to previous message for ch 19 under username 'deletingbcfictiondidn'thelp'. Deleted it, so I can't log in. I forgot to say, and felt uncomfortable since it felt like omission - the religion I follow is Islam. Sorry to add on another review which isn't one really for the sake of clarifying again. And again, feel free to delete this along with the clarifying review and original review which contained the lie I had to clarify for in the first place. Promise not to bother you again.
| deletingbcfictiondidn'thelp chapter 19 . 4/8/2016
I'm sorry this isn't a review (and please feel free to delete this, only I'd be really grateful if you could also delete the previous review I gave under the same username for chapter 20 because it has a lie in it and the reason I'm writing this now is to own up to that lie)
I'm writing this because I want to be honest. I lied in that previous review for chapter 20 where I said I "liked a little yuri or yaoi but not as the main centre of the story". The truth is I don't actually like yaoi or yuri in any quantity, and that it makes me uncomfortable because homosexuality is prohibited in the religion I follow. But I didn't want to say that at the time. Honestly I should've just not touched one the topic at all instead of lying about it, but I was 13 and stupid.
However, please don't misunderstand me. I don't believe in pushing one's own religion on others, and I'm not writing this message to try and force other people to think the way I do, or as a form of hate mail. My beliefs are my choice, other people's beliefs are their choice, and I absolutely have no intention to behave hatefully toward someone who believes in something different. I just wanted to own up about a lie and be honest about what I personally believed and believe in. I'm sorry to have to do it in this awkward manner.
| heyyyjudes chapter 21 . 4/6/2016
That was just 3
| khevaden chapter 21 . 3/24/2016
I'm gonna miss this story sooooo much I'm like crying...
| khevaden chapter 10 . 3/22/2016
I LOVE this book, I love all love-hate books :D
| Du chapter 21 . 1/28/2016
Why didn't I find this story when it was first posted? My teenage self would have loved it. I was a Dashboard Confessional kinda girl, totallyin love with Andrew McMahon too - I kept replaying anything Jack's Mannequin but also some of Something Corporate's beautiful stuff like 'Konstantine'. This was all so totally relatable to my teen years! My best friends, one of them was in love with Pete Wentz and the other had this humongous obsession with RyDen (Ryan Ross / Brendon Urie). I preferred Spencer Smith myself...
Anyway. I had lots of fun reading this. At times I hated it, though, so elaborating on your question on this uber last AN (though I don't know if you'll be rewriting this anyway...), at times it seemed a bit racist, I think? I don't know how to describe it, it was just a general feeling I got, especially the first half of the story. I'm glad in the end you turned Nicholas into being Mexican, because I'm Spanish and his slang was way off to be Spanish. I didn't appreciate it much, even if it was Mexican. The word "puta" holds such a chauvinistic feel, its only equivalent in English would be "whore". "Slut" we tend to say "zorra" if you're really straight-forward, but overall people don't use either of them.
But anyway. Enough with the criticism. I really, really did enjoy this story. Just like Brody's "Inexplicable", the whole story held so much emotion. It was gripping from the start, I couldn't stop reading. I love how they both got to explore other relationships, and the Brody-Leesh action didn't happen until the last chapters. You madr everything flow at a perfect pace. And to think you wrote this when you were just fifteen blows my mind.
Thank you for this story :) Sorry for the negative criticism, overall the story was so good that a couple words in macho Spanish weren't enough to drive me away... I will reread this in the future, I'm sure.
Best wishes! xxx
| Ghost Heart 123 chapter 21 . 10/28/2015
I think you should rewrite just simply because they are like the cutest couple and I want to watch there lives unfold again. Pretend that didn't sound all you know fangirlish.
| SpontaneousLaughter chapter 3 . 10/17/2015
This is beautiful.
| SpontaneousLaughter chapter 2 . 10/17/2015
It's sad that you're ashamed of this story, because I think that it's beautiful.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/17/2015
Reminds me of Flipped. Im liking this story so far.
| sallusocialites chapter 21 . 6/21/2015
You wrote this when you were FIFTEEN? That's amazing. I love the uncertainty of what would happen being there throughout the story. It was never predictable.
| amama123 chapter 1 . 6/2/2015
Also I would 100% read a story, even a oneshot, about Nick and Micki :)