Yumi was certainly put through hell but her battle w%th Photine was wonderful. I like her displayof power and her inner struggle with the voice in her head. I wonder who exactly it was that helped her out.

Yumi continues to grow in mentality and power. I see that her control is becoming better and she's growing as a fighter. Nice action and development of both she and Phontine.

It's nice to see Seiji on screen, since that was his running joke in earlier chapters. The chapter was full of action and I read it straight through without pausing and I'm at work atm. Things are slow so I'm hiding out on my phone. XD well, on to the next chapter.

This chapter left off on a cliff hanger note, but I think Yuki and Yumi will be alright. They have both grown substancially as characters. Her brother's thoughts on her as well as Yuki's awareness of Eudokia has served as backup on that.

I like the depth of characterization done to Demosthenes in this chapter. The more I read on him, the more intruiging he is to me. I want to know his motive, drive and beliefs. This chapter also gives insight to a few other Atlanteans who are against our heros as well. I'm looking forward to the future chapters now that I can catch up properly again.

Hey there! It's been a bit of a while, but I wanted to come back and review again.

I read a bit of chapter 188 for style, and my guess has been confirmed. You do get better with time, in fact, you get a lot better with time. Not really much else to say but my mantra from last review: "It's been four years."

I really did not feel like reading your update blurb even though told me to. It has all the hallmarks of a new writer who doesn't know what they're doing yet. It encourages me to forget about everything I learned in the last chapter, because it's all going to change here. I posit a question: If the story actually starts with this chapter, why not start with this chapter? This chapter can get us invested just as well as the last one did.

The answer is: You were new at the time and didn't know what you were doing. That's okay. It's perfectly normal. In the first fanfic I wrote I was a terrible cannon-thumping mess and made myself sound like a pretentious brat. (My regular stories just had illogical plots.) I am in the process of re-editing that chapter to remove the pretentiousness.

Anyway, the story proper starts with the same scene that opened the pilot- Champion Yuki being praised for defending the castle. Then he hears a female voice calling to him.

"The entire world went black suddenly washing away as though it had all been freshly painted pealing way under the pressure of water. All that he could see was the black void around him and then a narrow line of light that slowly widened revealing his bedroom ceiling and his older sister, Momoko's brown eyes staring over him."

I love this bit. The description is perfect, creating wonderful imagery in my mind. The fact you had Momoko wake him up this time instead of Ayumi was a nice touch. I think it makes more sense having someone that he connects to waking him up. At the same time, Momoko's eyes should not be staring over him. Momoko is standing or leaning over him, her eyes are probably staring at him. The preposition "over" feels a bit awkward where you placed it.

Momoko's interaction with Yuki is just plain fun. The siblings' personalities are clearer than they were in the last chapter. Momoko and Yuki seem a lot more realistic now. Ken and Jun have different personalities, which makes them more interesting. Saki comes in much later here, but she's more clearly established. I know I praised the last chapter for being a good introduction to the characters, but with this one, they feel more complete. These characters are more like real people.

I enjoyed the plot for this one much more than the last one. This chapter takes its time. The pilot really felt rushed, with all the characters and events you were trying to cram in. Here, everything is established when it needs to be, making the characters more three-dimentional and giving Yuki more time to play with his daydreams/powers. I really found the trees falling to be more interesting than Yuki's powers in the last chapter. This is showing its full potential. I can't wait to read more!

And now, a short rant about updates:

I'm surprised you've been able to keep the story going that long with an average of 3000 words per chapter and keep a regular update schedule. Obviously, the word count is skewed up because of author's notes, updates, and the like, but I would never be able to keep a story running for so long. Four years! How do you do that? If you want to take a break from this story, could you please write an essay on how to update regularly. I really need to use your tricks.

Looks like the Atlanteans are going to up the ante. Somehow I knew Yuki and Seiji's plan would land them eben more in trouble. I wonder what the Whites will present to the evolving situation.

I wonder how the people will react to Yuki's proclamaition now that he's outted himself. I have a feeling things will get more complicated from here.

Poor Fumiko. Ibet she feels bad about her powers getting out of hand and scortching the village.

The fight with Eusebios and Yuki was enjoyable and interesting. However I wonder what will happen now that the Atlanteans have custody of Yori and Yumi?

The fight with Kalliope and Fumiko had me on edge. It's probably the best of the fights so far. I hope that Fumiko can control her powers and doesn't end up truly making herself a terrorist in Atlantean eyes.

Yumi's new power is intetesting. I loved her moment of growth and strength when she protected Yori. It seems thier roles have reversed even if it's momentarily.

Yuki and Seiji's fight about enemies and battles added himor to the otherwise serious situation. I am still in intrigue on Mr. Alexander. I feel like he has a huge role in all of this.

Yumi is growing a lot as a character and becoming stronger as well. I assume this is the extent of her new power? I like that she's learning to fight for herself and being led away from her fragile school girl former self.

The scene between Yuki and Seiji was a strange mix of comical and heartwarming in it's own tough live way. I'm glad the other members of yhe group are headstrong it puts a nice inptedictable feel to thier unity. I'm looking forward to the possible fight ahead.

Is Yuki going to show himself against the ruthless search party? If noone stops him more than likely. I wonder what the others will do.

Yori had a brilliant idea with having Yuki construct a translator for him. I relate a lot to him out of all of the travelers. I think Yuki's reliance on Eudokia could prove just as much of a wealness and that sometimes he needs to find things out for himself. I do wonder what the truth is behind the king's position as well as the pros and cons of it. I feel like there atr eords left unspoken on it.