Reviews for Lob Omen |
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![]() ![]() I ONLY HAVE TWO WORDS FOR YOU, KEEP WRITING. YOU HAVE A WONDERFUL IMAGINATION AND A REAL TALENT FOR PUTTING IT INTO WORDS. YOU HAVE A REAL GIFT. DON'T WASTE IT. THANK YOU FOR LETTING ME READ YOUR STORY, SHAZZA |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fabulous story. The euphoria was really overwhelming, in a good way. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i thought it was really awful and shitty and disgusting that you actually put "laughing at her outrageous comments about wanting to rape him" rape isn't funny, whether it is coming from a guy or a girl, and you could have at least changed it to "her outrageous comments about wanting to have sex with him", or even if you'd wanted to leave the part where they laugh about rape in there, which i don't see why, you should've put a trigger warning at the beginning of this chapter. some people do not like reading about characters that want to rape someone else, even if they're "joking". |
![]() ![]() Oh snap! Loving the character development with Leslie. But I'm still so confused...why do the cousins want to kill them? I hope I didn't miss you mentioning that earlier in the story! Hopefully things get cleared up soon. |
![]() ![]() WHOA WHOA WHOA, PRINCE IS WHAT? O_O BUT HE SLEPT IN THE SAME BED AS HER. AWKWARDDD lmaoo. That would've been the first thought that would've crossed my mind if I were Leslie. "YOU SNEAKY PERV!" :P Lol, I kid. I still love him. But wow, the end got serious fast. I really should sleep but I can't stop reading! |
![]() ![]() Holy crap Amy just took a turn I never expected. She's not that mean...is she?! :o I hope it's something like the cousins lied/tricked her into being like that without telling the entire truth. She was too nice in the beginning! Arghhh, I hope things get fixed soon :( And PRINCE'S SECRET. YES. |
![]() ![]() This chapter was really sweet, but why is Cole such a meanie :o Also, I wonder why Roman snorted at Leslie the first time he saw her at the beginning of the story ._. Was he just being a jerk? Oh well, shall continue reading! |
![]() ![]() Awww Prince is sooo cute! When I read about him and Leslie I just break into a huge grin lol. On to the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() Really liking the story so far! It's super interesting and I can totally relate to Leslie and her awkwardness with guys :P But man, all this talk of bagels is making me crave some so bad! Can't wait to continue reading |
![]() ![]() I really enjoyed this piece. Fun, interesting, and well written. This is ESPECIALLY true since this was written by, presumably, a high school student. The only thing that took me out of it was how affective Leslie was at damaging the wolves. In the beginning it seems as if they have increased stamina, resliance, strength, damage... etc... This was made evident when Roman hit his cousin across the face with a punch that "surely should have broken her nose" yet all she had was a minor cut. However, later on Leslie does some major damage to the cousins, and somehow even manages to keep up with them in speed. If this is due to some bonus to her physical capabilities because of the bond between mates then it wasn't clear. At most it is described as a mental increase in character... basically a moral/mental support. Again, loved the work. Really enjoyed it. I simply think you can take it even further. |
![]() ![]() ![]() PRINCE IS SO CUTEEEEEE! He reminds me of Honey from Ouran High School Host Club. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was very good... It was very detailed and the content was perfect... Speeling was very good... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting read. I liked Leslie, Roman, and Prince. |
![]() ![]() ![]() She loves him already? |
![]() ![]() ![]() great chapter you are doing a really awesome job writing ~Trance~ |