Reviews for Lob Omen |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Good job on the story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() EEK! I sent a review earlier, and I accidentally put Linsey, it's Leslie. I'm sorry! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, While I was reading this chapter, I noticed a couple of detail errors. At the beginning, she introduces her mother and father. However, earlier in the story, she explains that she has a problem with talking to guys, because she isn't used to talking to them. She says something along the lines of "the only guy I talked to was my father, and he wasn't one to look up to". Also, near the end, Lindsey invites Roman into the house, but in the next paragraph he is suddenly on the porch. I just thought that you might want to know. I understand the mistakes, and I'm not trying to be a bother or anything. But don't worry, I love the story, I'm hooked! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Darn, its over. Well at least now the computer won't keep calling me every time I walk past. ( Come and read, come and read Lob Omen, it's waitting for you...)I loved it and will definitely be reading the sequel. I am a little bit confused about Cole though. One second he was on their side then he was fighting alongside Christian. Oh well. Great job with the writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Must... stop...reading... Okay, on the count of three I will close the computer and not read anymore for today. One...Two...Thr ah! I can't bring myself to do it. I think it is absolutely awseome. I really do think you should publish it. I actually think you could out do Twilight..and I am only on chapter 15. Keep it up you are a really good writer. (If this review or one almost identical to it is posted then my bad. My computer supposively lost connection right as I submitted and I don't know if it posted or not.) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay you finish! Congrats girl! But a sequel? OMG so totally reading it! Also its a funny title of it so I give you props! Love you girl! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really enjoyed this story, and I definitely agree that your characterization is great; I really felt attached to Leslie right from the very beginning. I definitely plan on reading your other stories! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think you deserve cookies, streamers and happy bouncing bunnies for writing such a marvellous story. Leslie changed from being a shy girl to a strong one and I hardly ever see that in stories anymore. I've already told you about how much I loved the Amy/Leslie thing...but I have to remind you how much it made the story so much better. I was little sad to see Amy go good again. I thought she had totally gone to the dark side and nothing would bring her back. I felt a bit weird with Prince going big and tough...to tell you the truth he annoys me a bit. (Prince fans murder me.) But I'll still read the sequel about him! I really hope Callie dies! I hate her guts, reminds me of girls in my school who love to turn friends against each other. Anyway, I'm thinking of nominating you for The Fiction Press Supernaturel Story Awards...and you should seriously think of publishing this story. It's much better then Twilight! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story was amazing :) Though, I can't decide whether Roman being the Aplha is a good thing, or a bad thing... Can't wait to see what you have planned for the sequel :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() AW! I love that you got Amy back to being good. That's always bothered me. I didn't like her evil. :D I love how you've finished the story! It's unbelievable! I would've reviewed earlier, but my email only sent me the last chapter for some reason... XD Anyways... I loved it! End of story in more ways than one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey! i just finished reading ur story..and its relli good..is there a sequel or something..? |
![]() ![]() ![]() The Amy and Leslie getup is one of my favourite parts of this story. I honestly have seen girls act like this over a boy (heck sometimes I do myself) and it makes the story so much more realistic. I think the scariest thing at high school is when your once best friend suddenly hates your guts and you've written it down great. Thumbs up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok. So Im really confused now. What side is Cole on? I thought that he was Romans brother. And that they were on the Grey's side. But if he was fighting Mrs. Grey then is he on the other side? But that doesnt make sense b/c Mrs. G was crying over his body...So Im so lost right now... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm sad it's over. I think this is definitely your best story Not that the New Havoc series isn't good, this one is just better (in my opinion). It was very well written and the plot kept me guessing. Any thoughts of trying to get it published? Amazing job-I can't wait for the sequel! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh man! I love the ending, but i want them to all come back to life! And i adore prince! Can't wait for his story! |