|Reviews for Darkheart|
| MagicWords chapter 5 . 2/11/2009
Sorry it has been so long!
This chapter was very good though. I like how we finally got to the meeting of Mike and Julie. Three guesses that that wolf in the woods was John!
I think though that the meeting should be a little more lengthly. We didn't really get too much insight on Mike or Julie. I think it should be lengthened.
But it was overall very well done. Hope you update soon.
Thanks for reading Crimson Sky too. Hope you continue to enjoy it.
| lunainthestars chapter 5 . 2/5/2009
john...a new problem for cale. uh oh. i can already see something's coming. and did cecilia really come? and why? keep writing...you know how impatient i am...
| VelvetyCheerio chapter 5 . 1/27/2009
Hi! I finally got to your story, I've been trying so hard, but I've been all bogged down. Glad you updated, though. :)
Ah, this chapter was nice. I like how you described the house, how I could practically see it in my mind. Julie must be set for life. Hmm, the woman is okay, but I wonder why her son wasn't mentioned. Weird.
Wow, and when Cale and Sara met that other wolfheart in the forest, how strange. Hope it's not Cecilia, but I mean, she IS still out there. I just wonder who it could be. Very interesting.
Good update, glad you found the time. :) Velvet.
| Dances with sloths chapter 5 . 1/21/2009
very nice zach. lots of stuff could happen from this point so i like how you leave it all opened. i also liked the reference to pizza shoppe haha. nice chapter!
| lalalynzie chapter 5 . 1/20/2009
i'm so close to the end but gosh, my mom wants to go to bed so quick review so far...
when sara nudged cale, i thought, "omg she's gunna cheat on cale!"
maybe that's the pessimist in me.
and julie and john leaving and "gone for the day"? how convienent...
" the woods right behind East Longmeadow High School. "
be careful zach, would you like to get stalked down by a crazy reader? haha... like me! :D
nah you can just come here. i won't say were here is so I don't get hunted down.
oh get it, hunted. oh man i'm great. :p
anyways, so far so good!
minus all the bathrooms. unless you make the group all flush them at the same time. now THAT should be done, since i'm putting what you wanna do in my story. ;P
| Dark Maelstrom chapter 5 . 1/20/2009
Whoa, it looks like things never seem to work out for the group. Honestly, I think one of the werewolves is one of the three new characters. Update soon, I love this story!
| Oh.Ducky chapter 5 . 1/20/2009
Well this was a long chapter.
It was well-written. I don't think that I saw any grammar mistakes, but I'm one of the most oblivious people in the world, so I guess there's a possibility...
Who was that wolfheart? Gah! I'm guessing it was one they've never seen before because it was so gosh darn big, but it's killing me not knowing who it was! Was it sent by Cecilia? Is this just a whole new enemy that they have to look out for? And Sara can smell Cecilia? I really hope Cale kills her! I want her dead. But I have to admit, she is sort of a good enemy. Well-developed and her motives are clear.
And Julie! Dang that house is huge! How did she get all the money to afford it? I'm guessing you're probably going to explain it later, but if not, now you know to do that! Well, you don't HAVE to, just take that as advice from me that it would help a little.
So yeah. I liked this one. His thoughts are so fluent and real, it's like I'm really inside someone's head! No joke.
Anyway, great chapter, I loved it.
| lunainthestars chapter 4 . 1/2/2009
this WHOLE TIME i have been DYING to say this one thing: it's not 'purpose,' it's 'propose.' get it right. and there was one other word that you messed up on but i forgot what it was.
and what was wolf going to call cale? i'm actually quite interested. i need to know if it's the kind of thing i'd say if somebody's belt was metal and they didn't know it.
and the fact that i'm reading this story must prove that it's good, so next time i review and i don't say it's a good story, don't freak out. i'm just getting bored of saying that every single time i review. keep writing!
| lalalynzie chapter 4 . 1/1/2009
pish posh, where was my "the chapters up!" text?
well either way, you're writing really has seemed to change, you've gotten rid of the websters dictionary it appears. :P haha but i like it better, i really don't hear many kids talking how cale did in the beginning of wolfheart.
ps my last chapter for a while is up.
you know why.
| Daggerhart chapter 4 . 1/1/2009
Good chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next!
| MagicWords chapter 4 . 12/31/2008
Another well written chapter from you 8Days.
Honestly, I was waiting for something menacing to happen on the airplane or at the airport but it never did. Not to say it wasn't good, but I thought there'd be some excitement.
I still think it was a well informative chapter though. You are getting your characters personalities across very well and I laughed at the "where the sun don't shine" part. Poor Cale. haha!
Can't wait to meet this filthy rich fiancee. Wonder if she's gonna turn out to be a hunter or something! Yikes! And then she'll catch on that her new stepson and his girlriend are werewolves and she'll be insanely evil and...im getting way ahead of myself with these predictions! haha!
But stepmothers are never usually good per say now are they? Hm...
You are doing a great job! Can't wait for more!
| Beast King chapter 1 . 12/30/2008
Good first chapter. The way the race was described in such great detail! It sounds like a great beginning for the 2nd book.
| Dances with sloths chapter 4 . 12/29/2008
OOPS! reviewed the wrong chapter by mistake. Knowing me thats bound to happen again.
| Dances with sloths chapter 1 . 12/29/2008
Nice chapter. It's like it refreshed our memories as to what everyone's personality was like in Wolfheart. Other than that, it was a funny chapter and you know I like humor in stories. Can't wait for chapter 5 and everything after!
| VelvetyCheerio chapter 4 . 12/29/2008
The security guard incident was hilarious. Wolf is so mean, but you have to love him. XD. Glad you updated, though. I was wondering where you had gone.
Mm, not much on this chapter. It's always good to get Cale's thoughts though, so I was very happy bout that. I can't wait to see what happens when they actually get to Mike's house and explore the wild, if there is any. Hopefully there will be other wolfhearts to meet.
Good job. Velvet.