This is great, thanks!

Look. You can't do that shit, it's annoying. Change it to in-progress, so that more people don't get damn pissed that it's not done. Yes, I will bitch and moan about it. I'm pissed.

AAAAHHHHH! I love it!

:( yet you stop writing the other story I'm sorry but why i was so sad when I got to the end counted how many chapters there were And I was so excited to read them and then bam ends in the middle I wish you continued this

GRR! I'm leaving a review here and on the other story... what is going on with this story?! This is an amazing plot, with a great beginning... so PLEASE finish it! And WHY would you put this story as complete? I was so excited to count down the chapters as I wanted to finish the story and get the full-loop ending, when BAM! no ending! :( Please keep writing!

Hey I must say this is an amazing story and I am sad your not continuing with the story line I really think you should plus I want to know who jer kills right at the beginning please please please continue this story please!

I love tis story, but I thought Summer was oing to have to give Jeremy an heir?

Merlot wine isn't supposed to be served chilled; red wines are supposed to be served at room temperature. Also, neither of those meals would go with a merlot. XP Sorry. However, I am enjoying this story very much.

You know, i really liked this story (although Sumer getting in the Shower with Jeremy seemed a little out of charater). i hope you didn't gut it too much. You had the emotions and everything really well written. anyway, i'm definitely going to be reading the new version. i actually hope you update it...at least faster than this one, lol.

""Alright! I'm getting up!" Summer's eyes glared at the door where her brother had been standing less than a second ago and then peeled the warm comforter back from her long tan legs. She stretched her legs out over the side of the bed, slowly getting up as two of the maids entered the room, pulling back the curtains to the French doors, the New York sun streaming into her room. One of the perks of living in upstate New York less than a half hour from the city, and in a beautiful mansion, was the wonderful breeze and sun that always came into her room first thing in the morning. [One of the maids opened the French doors that led out to a small balcony and then quickly skirted away to the bathroom laying out a few towels for Summer to use. With a nod of her head, the two maids left the room and Summer headed into her bathroom for a quick shower before her brother could come in a bother her again."]

Where the [ ] are, the paragraph needs to be separated as you talk about two different things in there.

Cut this paragraph down a bit into three sections (note! The paragraph below is not the whole thing, im just showin you which one it is):

When they finally got home Summer went up to her room to change out of the soft pink dress she had been wearing under her white graduation gown and to put on a simple pair of white short shorts and a black spaghetti strap tank, she then slipped her feet into a pair of white flip flops and headed down to the main staircase...

Hey I notice that this is supposed to be a bit of a crime story, it doesn't sound like it much. The beginning yes but this chapter, no. It's too teen themed and preppy... Just saying.

A few mistakes with the use of past and present text.

"Summer whimpers from her spot on the floor as Charles back up slightly"

Use: whimpered instead of whimpers and backed instead of back.

"Jeremy's voice cuts Summer off, causing her to wince at the venom in his voice. But she looks up at him and nods slowly, more tears welling in her eyes."

Cut instead of cuts. Looked instead of looks. Nodder instead of nods.

"Jeremy!" Charles finally speaks up again. "You can't really believe her over me? She's just a whore..come on now cousin.."

Spoke instead of speaks.

""Well then, I know exactly what to do," Jeremy smiles maliciously as he raises the gun and pulls the trigger."

Correction: Jeremy smiled maliciously as he raised the gun and pulled the trigger, the bang echoing against the walls like a lightning bolt.

I'm only helping -.- it'd make more sense if you changed the past tense thing I used in allthe corrections.

It's great by the way! I was impressed by the summary :)

Keep on writing,

Grace

YESSS! Welcome back. Definitely looking forward to reading your stuff again (y)

I would've nvr known that was your first lemon so I think it ws a good job, I love the story & am anxious to read the next chapter so plz update asap! :D

This is really good for a first lemon.

I don't like his father.