Reviews for The story of a perfect girl
Wounded Warrior chapter 1 . 12/11/2008
Interesting premise, but I noticed a lot of issues with the use of tenses.

Also, when you reword something, you don't necessarily have to tell us (the readers) that you're rewording it.

For example,

"She do not have any emotion or in another words, she is an ice queen and hates being with people."

would sound better if it were worded like this (I also fixed the tense errors):

"She does not have any emotion. She is an ice queen who hates being around people."
Ocstasia chapter 1 . 12/11/2008
That's was pretty good and sad. Please write version 2.