Reviews for My Odd Love Story
Pjp chapter 1 . 1/1/2016
waaaaaaaa I've been looking for you stories coz I forgot the title. :( no wonder I can't find it huuhuhuhuhu
nooo chapter 1 . 5/12/2015
Nooooo :( please post it agaaaain. I love your story and I spent the whole week trying to remember the title and eventually looking it up on google using keywords T.T pls pls
Anonymous chapter 1 . 5/6/2013
I'm sorry to hear you had to take your stories down. I rather enjoyed 'My Odd Love Story' and hoped to read more of your work. But I wish you the best of luck :)
Swyze chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
I see a twisted plot :P
3 your story can't wait to read the next chapter
Made To Syn chapter 22 . 12/23/2011
AHH! it can't be over! oh well. it is. it was good. a few grammar mistakes but beside that nothing.
Princess Mariana chapter 22 . 4/7/2011
Awesome! it was kind of random at times...but that made it surprising and awesome! :)
Sakurachibi08 chapter 22 . 2/13/2011
Aww! I read this all in one sitting, it's so sweet!
HoPELeSS.RoMaNTiiC chapter 9 . 1/26/2011
I really like the concept of your story, it's interesting and unique, however, I do think it needs to be reviewed. now I'm no writer so I don't mean to tell you how you should write your story but I just want to tell you what I find wrong and how I think you could fix it.

1- Sarah really ticks me off sometimes. Yes it's refreshing to have a childish humorous character but sometimes It can be overdone. Example, bedroom scene, instead of having her scream out for her mother why not get her to slap him, then his yells will get her mother's attention and you can slot in the childish mother there.

2- William- now I know teenage years are a bit of an identity crisis, he'll I'm gong through one of my own but it just doesn't make sense for him to believe that he is a homosexual but loves her. Maybe instead of moving their relationship on so fast you can have a lot of tension between the two that just builds. I really don't like the scene where he says he loves her in the car, i think instead of having him say I love you, he should say to her 'Sarah, I don't really know what's going on, I mean up until a few weeks ago, I was happily gay hut now that I've met you I realize that I'm extremely attracted to you. I don't know what this means about my sexual orientation but all I know is that since I've met you, I haven't looked at another guy since' or something to that effect.

3- let's make her jealous scene- not good. It seems petty and it is way too quick. I get that this story is suppose to be humorous however, let's be realistic here. Does a gorgeous that you have never seen before in your life just waltz up to you right when you need him.?. No he doesn't. And to have the conversation right in front of William and not have him get theconcept of is just unbelievable. I think a revenge scene could fit in your story but only after they get together.

4- grammar and punctuation- please, this site has beta's for a reason, to check over one's work to make sure it not only is spelt correctly and sounds right but also to offer ideas about your story. Do they like it? Does it sound good? Would they change anything? They offer their assistance to help you make your work better, if you can and you haven't already try and get one. If you already have, ask them questions because they will see things differently and will always have something valuable to say.

I hope these points help you and I am sorry if they are harsh but I think that this story has potential, you just need to nurture it.
Madam Vendetta chapter 6 . 1/13/2011
so... I'm guessing that Will is bisexual but thought he only liked guys... and Sarah is hetrosexual but her brother scared her of guys when she was eight.

Yep, that's what I'm going with

angellover254 chapter 22 . 1/10/2011
This was a very interesting story! I never heard of this one b4 so that good. I love original the best! Glad that they ended up together, and I love the ending...
Really chapter 1 . 11/14/2010
I was all for reading this story and i know it an old story so this review may new been seen but i just has to say are you serious this is what you say in the begging before the story "Don't worry. It's not male to male relationship or female to female relationship. It's actually quite normal." normal begin gay is just as normal as being straight you have some nerve not going to read this story.
azeeunlove chapter 22 . 11/4/2010
so so so so cute

i love it

:) great job and all

i love the ending too... but (im assuming it's an engagement ring) i wish i knew how he proposed

hahaha :P
Random chapter 22 . 7/23/2010
That was the weirdest, most demented story I have ever read but with that it was hilarious, captivating and well just plain awesome XD
Riley T chapter 22 . 7/20/2010
aw that was the sweetist ending ever thank you for another great story
Riley T chapter 21 . 7/20/2010
ok are his parents into BDSM or something?
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