Interesting storyline, I liked it :) Especially your dialogue. I can't seem to get dialogues right. Mine seem really stiff.

Do you realise how many disgusting cliches you have supported. Lesbians dont have to act like guys or be strong. The are often just as interested in makeup as other girls. Most of them have friends, and those who do are ussually the ones you run to for help first. Why did you portray her as a social outcast?

and just so you know. It is possible to like both guys and girls. Its called being bi (bisexual). It is also possible to not like either. Thats called asexual. I am concerned because lots of my friends read this sort of stuff and mean that when i eventually come out to them, this will b one of the things they think of.

I think you'd be suprised how many people you know are closet gay and too scared to say anything because of fear inucing stories like this. this hardly explored anything except prejudice and how much it hurts.

i hope it goes somewhere useful