Holy shit now that was beautiful

wow!

Amazing :D *slow clap*

So powerful. Amazing. I applaud you.

This was really good. You should make chapters with this. The short lies delivered a real punch.

i love this of my fave os here,in fact.

i have to say that ur experiment imo was a success.

the writing style made the character's emotions so raw and it suited the cheating theme.

yea! u go girl! ;D

nice.

very nice.

in the fact, of course, that she got to be not nice back to him.

hey..that was strong and intense and i didnty read it i felt it and i liked it..ur good..i hope to read more of ur writings

Wow you're an incredible writer.

Woah!

Beautifully done, I totally felt her pain and anger and disgust and everything. Fantastically conveyed. Loved: 'You look so vulnerable, more boy than man in that moment, and I cannot help myself.' I loved the style of it and the ending, so satisfying XD

That was amazingly written! I love your heroine!

I'm sick of all those stupid cheaters and worse! The girls who take them back! This restored my faith that girls can be independent and won't die when they lose their man.

Oh, this is great. Really great.

you are a wonderful writer... my heart always seems to be beating when ever i read one of your pieces...

I liked your story. It's actually hard to find good writing on even though there are so many stories to read from. You write incredibly well and I was amazed that there were hardly any grammar mistakes. Maybe you can write a longer story with chapters, if you are not already doing so. Hope this was helpful and keep on writing because you really have talent with a pen or a computer- whichever you use.