I found this one-shot confusing. I was confused about who was talking, where they were etc. More details would be nice- that could be how we understand who the people are. I at first thought it was two woman talking.

This was sexy, fun and nicely written. I don't have much to say about criticism, considering the length is so short. I suppose my criticism would be that you lack certain descriptions such as thoughts and how the unnamed friend looked, other than being "hot". There are a few minor details that could be expanded such as her thoughts, but overall it's a nice little snippet.

I only pushed this button bcuz i like buttons but the story is cute too

DIS IS COOL I LIKE IT :) SUPER CUTE ATTEMPT

I love this

Omg words cannot even form sentences to tell you how amazing this is

It would've been much cuter if it was Logan she was talking to. I loved it though, awesome story!

I like it but it needed to be longer plus you try to use words like 'explained', 'questioned', 'accused'. Words like that instead of he said she said. It works better

It wasn't confusing at all! Really unusual story, but I like it all the same. The last dialog is cool, where she says she's changing her type. I think it could use dialog tags though, generally. More than 'she said' and 'he said', that is. Otherwise, great oneshot :)

x mandy

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I loved this! I figured out who was speaking what. I think it's great without the "she said" and "he said." Makes the story more interesting.

I sort of thought that it was Logan. Oh well. xD

Gah, why is he unnamed? His name must be... Bob...

loved it! it was so hot! arrogant rich boys are so overrated! i liked both the leads in the story! please write more like this!

'Simple but Great.! :) Love it.! :))

I like how you wrote this, it was simple and sweet. Good work!

Cute :D

You could put his speech in bold or something...

It was good :D

Aww, that was pretty cute!