Reviews for Arrogant, Hot, Rich Boys
Cecily Mitchell chapter 1 . 4/7/2010
It may help if you added descriptors to the he said/she said stuff like, he spat or she quipped or she said lightly...and things of that nature.
paraNormal chapter 1 . 12/11/2009
nice idea. if there was some way you could convey the fun of making him red in all dialogue, i think i would like it better.
xxXNightsareDaysXxx chapter 1 . 9/29/2009
hahaha...I wasnt confused at all! No worries, mate!
SunsetRainbow chapter 1 . 9/17/2009
That was hot! P

And rly rly cute
Mirabella chapter 1 . 6/14/2009
Awesome!

And maybe, as regards the letting people know who's talking part, you could sa something like: "he smirked down at her", or "she tried, clearly making him uncomfortable." Maybe...
Isforwinners chapter 1 . 6/14/2009
Aw, wow. Your very good at writing oneshots.

'grats.

This is really fun, and clever.
MiZZ SaHurr chapter 1 . 6/12/2009
I wasn't confused at all, actually. I liked it, even if it was kinda short lol. Good job!
I Murder on Impulse chapter 1 . 6/6/2009
hahaha very nice :P

xx
annoyance chapter 1 . 5/19/2009
Interesting, and unusual. Two things I'm constantly looking for on FP :)
folsom chapter 1 . 4/19/2009
seriously, I'M SO CONFUSED!

but i like it...just a bit shocked or unsure if she liked her unnamed friend or Logan...i'm really confused...
Sir Pebbles chapter 1 . 4/5/2009
Lol. Short and nice. I liked it. Hehe. And it's evident she's not talking to Logan. .O
NV12 chapter 1 . 3/21/2009
love it haha
blurrylights chapter 1 . 2/25/2009
I think it was pretty clear, who the dialog was between. I really liked it, in fact. Interesting and well written. I like how there wasn't much description, but i could still see the image. Nice work!
VELVETxKISSES chapter 1 . 2/25/2009
Alright, so I absolutely LOVE this concept. The basic idea of the story is genius, frankly, wish I’d thought of it myself. But you’re right, the delivery of the thoughts is a bit… unfinished. You mentioned in the author’s note towards the end that you didn’t want the “she said” “he said” type of narrations, however, you can use other words as opposed to “said” such as, “she whispered” “he teased”. Also, I thoroughly enjoyed it being in first person as opposed to third person. However, some of the first paragraphs you used could be put higher up in the story. The paragraph where she mentions that he ran away from her, you could put that after “You usually don’t go to parties.” I think that if you added some more descriptive words, you’d like it more. I’m working on the first chapter/prologue of a new story and it basically started off with me simply describing how I look when I sleep. I thought I wouldn’t like it because of how little dialogue there was, but I ended up loving it, and now I’m writing a whole story on it. I’m still working on a title, but title’s come with time. (: If you need anymore help or suggestions, I could try my hardest. My email address is in my profile under the “About Moi” section. But, aside from all that, I really did enjoy this little piece. (:

*Avey
AlmostCrazy chapter 1 . 1/28/2009
Well, you could mention Logan kissing some girl in the distance or something, I don't know. Overall, I loved it. Mega awesome.
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