Reviews for Arrogant, Hot, Rich Boys
BlueSoda chapter 1 . 1/21/2009
Nice!
TouchOfChaos chapter 1 . 1/20/2009
Hahahaha. that is all.
Aiko chapter 1 . 1/17/2009
You were right, that review button was looking awfully tempting and so-here I am! (trumpets sound and crowds cheer)

The story could use a whole lot more-namely storyline. The convo. you have down here was pretty good but there's no character definition, no purpose-no magnetism to really pull readers into it. I think if you redid this story alternating viewpoints between said arrogant, hot, rich boy and unknown girl it would be even better. There also needs to be some sort of conflict as well in order to portray said hot boy's arrogance. And how are we supposed to know that said boy is really rich? Or even hot? The description is lacking greatly. Or perhaps, if you are not one for describing characters (like blue eyes or whatever) you can have a story based solely on what they say, do and where they are. Just a few thoughts. Hope it helps. Keep it real, chica!
lola chapter 1 . 1/4/2009
is she talking to logan, cause that isnt visible.
wreckless.and.jealous chapter 1 . 12/31/2008
I like this story. It was very cute, man I wish that happened to me!
meduse chapter 1 . 12/25/2008
You said you needed criticism badly...

I assume that means you want me to the tell the truth and nothing but the truth...

So here goes...

IT WAS GREAT!

No really, it was very well written and thought out...

I really liked it :)

~DixieAusten
x3life chapter 1 . 12/24/2008
aw this was so cute )
MaPluie chapter 1 . 12/24/2008
This story is nice. But.. pretty confusing. Need to re-read it again. Good job, though. :)
Lily Llynn chapter 1 . 12/23/2008
Personally, I think this is really really confusing. Is she talking to Logan Draper or some other guy?

But other than that, this was pretty awesome. (: I'm glad xoxluurve added this to our c2. (:
Katie Valentine chapter 1 . 12/22/2008
hmm i don't get the male character and how he is arrogant, hot and rich though..but i was a bit confused at the start. like who she was talking to, haha. but i thought it was okay!
blazingstar1994 chapter 1 . 12/22/2008
All the while I could feel myself moving closer and closer to him. His face was heating up, his mouth gaping like a fish, stuttering slightly. It was so cute.

this part was a bit confusing. i couldnt figure out who she was talking to, and then it was him, but then the way the dialogue was written made me feel like it was someonelse that she was talking to.

but otherwise, i loved it! it was really cute :)
Camelia Sinensis chapter 1 . 12/22/2008
It ain't really that pretty, but i guess it wouldn't hurt to leave ya a review, right? ;)

This was really sweet and nothing like what I'd expected from the summary.

Congrats!
White Rose Blossom chapter 1 . 12/22/2008
Short, but sweet. Loved it! :)

-Aria
misssweetsweet chapter 1 . 12/21/2008
Interesting one shot. It seems a bit rushed and I would have liked for you to distinguish between the guy the female was talking to and Logan Draper. It seems like she is talking to Logan in certain parts, but other parts make is seem like she's talking to another guy. Other than those two things, I enjoyed it.
writingxonxwalls chapter 1 . 12/21/2008
Good job. Very cute and sweet, and I liked the last line (:
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