This story is really good as far as I've read. It would be great if you could polish over it and make the structure of the story less jumpy. I had a hard time following the story and had to give up reading it sadly. Though I really do want to read more its really hard to follow.

I must say I was very confused in some parts of this story and I truly don't think I was totally focused on it. (Sort of like mindless reading) I - Oh geez. You probably think this is a bad review, it's not don't worry. Sorry if I made you think that...
What I mean to say is that I was looking for something easy and fun to read that could keep my attention. This was perfect for that. I enjoyed it and now I'm going to the bathroom cuz I have to pee bai!

[If you didn't figure it out already it's late and I'm really tired. No doubt I'll regret this latter...]

Lovin' it so far! I love this relationship dynamic. I hope it gets steamy later on!

I 3 Ezra. And how fiesty lauren is. I want Tuck to end up with Jess.

Keep writing, Awesome characters!

xxx

Huh. Thought so. Ezra is a Jewish name

I found it surprising that she says she had so many goodbyes, but she only said goodbye to tucker.

I felt like she would have left him alone after his last fit.

It almost feels like Lily is just a random side note at this point. We really didnt get much of an explanation on her until way way later and then she just pops up out of nowhere now, yet there is no real interaction. I guess I was expecting there to be a greater struggle since there really wasn't any huge hierarchy of danger. Just bitter Lily. I guess I should see what's up with the sequel.

But hey...

haha i love it. its unconventional and appealing to readers :)

aw poor tucker.. cant wait for the next chapter to come out update soon XD

I really like this story but the misspellings sometimes throw me off. Have you thought about getting a beta?

Uh... Well I was not expecting that... Okay... Still kinda liked the story though, although it was kinda fast paced and random.

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Wait what? Lesbian-mutan freaks? What?('_')

I really like this story so far but I really want Ezra to tell Lauren something! soon. Gonna read more now :P

Silly place to end her story IMHO. Too many loose ends, there isn't really any closer to the story.

is the novel going to be about tucker?

hey, i've been reading this story since you first put the first chapter up on fiction press and i must say that the ending is very fast, and kind of fake. i didn't quite understand the whole tucker thing, he's going with her and why? it just felt very abrupt like you were looking for an ending.

so i hate to say what I'm about to say and please don't take it as flames, it's really just intended to be constructed criticism...so here it goes...

so...well...to put it bluntly...

your grammar is absolutely horrible! I tried to read as much as I could but by the fourth chapter I have given up; I can't read anymore without wanting to pull my hair out. It's mostly because you keep switching tenses (past and present) and you mix up a lot of subjects and pronouns (ex: you'll say that sarah said "bla bla" and then the next line you'll say SHE said "bla bla bla" so it sounds like the "she" is sarah but in fact, you have intended for that SHE to be a different character)