Reviews for Bet You Can't! |
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Yellow.Jellow chapter 11 . 12/5/2009 So... Tanya doesn't seem to be the same person she was at the beginning of the story... you'll probably say that Kyrian coming back changed her... or that we're just getting to know her better. I'm just pointing out that she seems less angry and bitter (despite how she treats Kyrian). Also, how is it that Kyrian has money to buy a coffee shop and afford a Mercedes, what is he? 19? 20? Finally, you made me cry! |
Fantom Phreeke chapter 1 . 12/5/2009 this seems very interesting! this seems like the perfect kind of romance story for me right now. I hope that I enjoy the rest of it as much as I liked the first chapter. -Bambi |
Yellow.Jellow chapter 9 . 12/5/2009 M god! Can't stop reading. I don't think I have anything to critique... I noticed that you use the British/European spelling for favorite and color and such |
AlphaBeatKayGee chapter 16 . 12/5/2009 Aw! Its ovver! Can't wait for the epi! Loved the progress of this story along with all the others you have written. On that note - update soon because this isn't really over! |
cerulean-azure chapter 16 . 12/5/2009 Loved the starting,as well as all the characters and dialougue. The only thing was that I thought that Tanya's self-defense mechanism against Kieran would take longer and more time to break down. I'm surprised she didn't do more to stay away from Kieran at first. However, great story, and am looking forward to the epilogue |
Yellow.Jellow chapter 5 . 12/5/2009 Also, I think I may end up staying up all night reading this instead of working on my own paper that's due in two days... thanks! |
Yellow.Jellow chapter 5 . 12/5/2009 Ahh! This chapter was even better though I don't think I've ever met a professor like this one... maybe that's why she doesn't have her doctorate, ha ha. There was one part earlier (?) where you used "I am" instead of "I'm" when one of the characters was speaking. I tend to think that when teens (people in general) are having normal conversations, they would probably use "I'm" just because "I am" is so formal. |
MaPluie chapter 16 . 12/5/2009 Oh, I didn't think that you mean that this was already the last chapter. I just thought that you're done with writing all of the chapters. I can't belive it somehow. But anyway, I liked it. First, I am really glad that Thane realized how stupid he was. I think it took a lot of thinking in his part. I'm just glad that he didn't make it so hard with Nick and Aria. He didn't exactly accept Jonah and Nevada's relationship as soon as Nick and Aria's. So, I suppose that's good. Second is I hope that Thane will also have a story. I agree with you on the one-shot. Just to clarify the things. And also so that Thane could have his own happily ever after. I think he deserves that after what he'd been through. :p And lastly, Kyrian and Tanya are cute. They haven't changed at all. They are still like they were back in the old days betting on anything. Lol. I'm glad that they finally got over their differences and had a shot with each other. :) I really do hope you'll write an epilogue. It'll be awesome. :p |
Yellow.Jellow chapter 3 . 12/5/2009 Oh interesting... I like her much better in this chapter I think... I can't remember what happened in DTIA so some of the references are bothering me a little but I'm hoping that's not a big deal or I'll have to re-read it, which I guess isn't that bad. Also, some typos at the beginning. On a different note, I wish my professors even remember that I'm in their class let alone know who I hang with. Very impressive. |
MarloCarlo10 chapter 16 . 12/5/2009 Loved this story! Ohh Nick such a goof ;) |
Sunsetshadow19 chapter 16 . 12/5/2009 Awesome story. Really hilarious. I admit to tearing up a few times, and that is the mark of a great author. You made me feel their pain although I did feel that the situation was resolved really quickly considering the emotional involvement of both parties. I loved the extra love interests in the story and Matthew was way out there- closet psychotic I guess. I look forward to reading more of your stories! |
chng234 chapter 16 . 12/5/2009 i m happy that r together n r happy. will u be writing another story on thane n allison? |
E. Collins chapter 2 . 12/5/2009 This is really good and I hope I have time to finish reading it! |
MarieAnn chapter 16 . 12/5/2009 Aw Great Ending! Can't wait to read the epilogue. Hopefully the Thane/Allison story will come soon :-) |
Crazy.Kc chapter 15 . 11/30/2009 Hey I love your story, can't wait to read upcoming chapters! |