Reviews for Bet You Can't!
inkwriter95 chapter 16 . 7/13/2012
Ok, lots of review-y stuff here. First, I really liked this story. It was nice and long and interesting all the way through. That said, I think it may have gone a little too fast. Yeah, I know, the whole ky-Tanya sex scene was all set up but... Well, I think their relationship should have taken longer to, uh, mend. You could have just had them sleep in the same bed, accidentally or something, and that would trigger the flashback. Oh well, it's your story. Also, I think you could've used a bit more background on some of the characters, like neveda, thane, and Jonah. I felt like I was missing something when they were brought up. Anyway, lovely story, good structure, nice grammar, I'm just sad it's over. )
ForgottenHope chapter 15 . 6/25/2012
I read this story before years ago. I've never read a story on here twice because I never felt the desire to do so, but I just HAD to read this one again. And I enjoyed it just as much! Speaks volumes on your storytelling. Don't know if you're still planning on posting an epilogue, but I'd say go for it. Doesn't matter how long ago you last posted. :)
me chapter 16 . 5/26/2012
epilogue coming soon huh? well it's been 3 years. i don't know what your definition of "soon" is.
N-butterfly chapter 2 . 5/17/2012
Whoa, okay... That was a waaay different turnout than I expected. I feel a little like Tanya's seriously full of herself, and I never usually like it when like, every single guy seems to be in love with the main character.

1. The flashback seemed a little unnecessary, yeah. It could've been summarized as a thought in a few sentences, but it's not that bad.

2. Erm is right. I laughed at first when he confessed, thinking this was like, something Kyrian arranged to happen, but when he started screaming at T in the pub, I was sooo just, weirded out.

3. Eh, pretty good. I love that it's well proofread (always appreciated), and the plot is moving along, I guess. The characters were nicely introduced.

4. Lmaooo on the sample comments, but I think I'll just head on to the next chap. Hopefully Kyrian's in it :)
N-butterfly chapter 1 . 5/17/2012
Cute first chap :) Funny, too ;)
twibbit chapter 16 . 4/6/2012
deadheart115 chapter 16 . 2/2/2012
So first of all, I can totally see how much your writing has improved - in terms of character development - since DTIA. I felt like Nessa and Chad - as much as I love them - were at first interesting characters, but somewhere along the line, Chad's character didn't seem too...HIM you know? He went all soft, and I guess love does that to you, but their characters weren't anything out of the ordinary.

To me, it seemed like all of the White sisters had similar personalities.

But HERE, I could really see the different character sides and personality. If you were to give me one distinctive sentence, I bet I could know which character of yours would be most likely to say it. I liked the fact that you added Tanya's martial arts skills, and Kyrian's arrogance and bluntness and "charm" ;). But it's not just that. The fact that you stuck with those little traits throughout the whole story made it more believable. In the end, Kyrian was still sarcastic, and blunt, and well...the charmer. And Tanya was still the tough person you made her out to be. So that was really well done!

Second, I was surprised on how the story was actually written. I thought, when I first saw the description, that this would be a completely different plot. I thought it would've taken place in the 11 grade, and it would tell the story of how she tried to seduce him. :P So i was a bit disappointed when that was not the case, BUT you did manage to make me love it even though I never ever seem to like stories where the characters had past...I don't know why. But this one actually made me feel sooo sad at some parts and really get into it, and I love it.

BUUUT...I kind of thought that you rushed the story a bit. Not in the sense that oh, Aria and Nick shouldn't have gotten together so early, and same with Ky and Tanya, no. Not like that.. I meant that I thought there were some parts where I would've liked to read more about, of course the seducing grade 11 bet, and well, more about their bets in general. Since, that is, after all, the title? And there was also a part where Ky kisses her for the first time since they've re-met :) and she supposedly was mad or something, and then in the next chapter or so, they suddenly were best friends again, and she inviting him to the wedding. I felt like I missed a whole chapter there, and I actually did have to go back and see if I yeah. I think you rushed that a bit, since it seemed like she was really heartbroken and pissed off, and all of a sudden, she wasn't.

I applaud you for your creativity - not only with the main plot line - but the little things, like Aria pretending to be gay was hilarious :P and how Ky left. I mean that was COLD and I actually felt soo bad for her. (and that's part of the reason that I felt like her forgiving him so easily was too rushed; I'd be reaaaally pissed off).

BUT I did love the story very much, and I loved Ky even more ;) His sarcasm honestly made my day! And Daniel and Ky's little sarcasm fight lol, :) And again, this is the first time I've read a story about two lovers who had history (not knowing it was going to be about that, of course ;P But still), and loved it!

GwennyP89 chapter 15 . 12/28/2011
Okay! Wow! This Chapter made me cry! I have two friends and a cousin who have lost their babies at less than a year so I've seen the pain up close...You did a pretty good job at not over dramatizing the truth of what happened to his little brother so props to that! )
Bookworm-At-Starbucks chapter 3 . 11/4/2011
okay, i knw that there are some people who love your story but all i got to say is for me it went downhill after the dare in elevnth grade. She acts like a high queen bitch and he is no better. i jope i dont offend you but thats how i feel. love your writing style by the way, that was the first thing that hooked me in .
GittaStar chapter 16 . 7/27/2011
LOve it!
mixed signals chapter 16 . 6/5/2011
Loved this :)
ClaireElizabeth chapter 16 . 6/1/2011
Awww Love This Story Some Bits Are Funny Some Are Really Sad About His Brother

You Are A Really Good Writer Hope You Write Some More Storys

Candescence chapter 16 . 4/16/2011
Cute story
TasteYourSins chapter 16 . 4/12/2011
Oh my God.


I thought it would reach 30. O_O Until I read the Author's note. O_O :O No seriously I'm shocked right now. :

But well. GREAT STORY! :D
TasteYourSins chapter 12 . 4/12/2011


And the question that's been haunting me...WHY DID HE LEAVE? confused right now. :(
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