great chapter, one thing, the evil man needs to be more evil to appear more real. hes to nice too her.

the first guy, is he still alive, and will he try to get her back?

Please finish this fast. I loved the old version and this version is even better, but I can't read all of it like I could the other one.

I have read this story before... what happened to it? there was more chapters in this story...Please relese all the reat of the chapter.. :)

im not a fantasy type of person but this is really good

just read the first three chapters- i do love this story and hope you continue!

I'm so glad you understand! Honestly, if I hadn't read the first verison of this story I would not be criticising/nitpicking the edit. They're both good but I feel the unedited version has the more palpable tension and on-the-edge-of-my-seat excitement. Also, this is going to sound really horrible but after reading Chapter 3 I am still batting for Team V.1. I can't really explain it but I think some bits where you've changed the wording and stuff just...killed it for me (or just..y'know..maimed). I think after the edits the characters seem different somehow, especially Alaric. It could be just me but he seems harsher, y'know? Like, whereas before he was all mysteriousmisunderstoodbadcop(butyouknowthere''twanttogothereheis.), now he's a bit- dare I say it- mehh. As I said, I'm still loving the plot and the writing is still WIN! but it doesn't cut it for me like the old version did. But then again that's just my opinion so feel free to rolleyes/overlook/ignore as you see fit!

Still enjoying the revision. I like that you included Edana as a means of submission.

I never read the original version of this story, so I'm a newer reviewer. You write with an eloquence that is a true rarity. Its amazing. I can't wait to read more.

I also looked at the character photos you selected...wow. hehe. Alaric and Leolwine are almost identical to how I imagined them. The fact that they're both gorgeous is simply a plus. Lol. I hope you update very soon! I enjoy your writing very much.

uh oh! Competition? Drama? I cant wait! :D

I am loving this story so far! cant wait for the next update

~Francine Brown

This is one story i am really looking forward to reading.

Please i ask you, dont take so long to update. Cant wait to read what happens next.

Deidre...m is she going to cause big drama...

Alaric...is his heart going to beat for one woman & one woman only...

& which one is it going to be...

will love triumph at the end...

I hope so

Please update soon

thats sleezy, using her sister against her.

the first draft was very well written but this one is great! update soon :)

AWESOME! Can't wait till the next chapter :)

Whoa! i almost forgot about this story! ..This was really good! I love it! now i know what happen to her little sister and i still cant believe she stabbed him lol anhywaz I wonder what is going to happen now