Reviews for My Beloved - Original, Unedited Version
ebs12 chapter 3 . 8/2/2010
I like that alaric is using edana to subdue anwen, i never understood that once they were married she just gave up as if it was her fate all of a sudden. if anwen is afraid of what he will do to her sister it would make more sense. not sure wether i like alaric in this version though. in the last one he said he went to war to stop death where he could but here he is threatening a little girl. he seems evil. update soon
TinuvielDork chapter 3 . 8/2/2010
I'm glad to see this is back! I always enjoy your updates.

I still don't like how Alaric seems to cast off Deirdre so easily when they were assumed close to engagement for a woman he never spoke to before a battle. It just seems odd to me that he would switch his choice so quickly.

Also, when Alaric is holding Anwen down, it said that his left hand was useless, but then when he reenters his village, it is his right arm that is injured.
OniRoi chapter 2 . 7/30/2010
This is fantastic. I really want to read the rest of it.
TheRushingRadiancexx chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
Er... wow. I hadn't even realized that I completely forgot to review the first chapter. I mean, here I am, stalking my e-mails for an update when I'm not even a proper reviewer! Oh, the horror. Anyways. I'm a little curious as to how Alaric would know her language but I suppose I'll find out later. Great start to what I'm sure will be a great story! Keep writing and update soon, please :)
IVORIE'S WONDERLAND chapter 1 . 7/23/2010
I'm not going to make this uber long, but I would love for this story to be continued. )

So far it's beautiful, and the slaughter that happened did bring a twinge of pain. I sat here and actually glared at the screen. Evil people. Blah on them. But, I do love Edana. She's adorable, worrying about her dog. x3 Doesn't matter how little of her is shown, I dare say, she's going to be my favorite. Children always are. ) As is Anwen. Beautiful names, btw.

But yes. I would love to see more of this story, and I can't wait to see how Deirdre reacts to Anwen. Haha. Should be interesting to see that, and the relationships grow.

Keep up the good work! I think I'll be going to read another story of yours. Many hearts to you, sweeting.
Francine Brown chapter 2 . 7/14/2010
More please! This is getting good! :D

~Francine Brown
TheRushingRadiancexx chapter 2 . 7/9/2010
Chills. That's what I get when I read this :) Keep up the amazing work and I hope we hear from you soon.
MiidKniight chapter 2 . 7/5/2010
This is getting intense. I've always hated when the heroine gives in too easily. Anwen doesn't seem like she will. I don't like Alaric. I'm sure this will change since I know nothing about his character but the feeling persists.

Many question that I'm sure will be answered soon. I will wait eagerly for the next chapter
Maria chapter 2 . 7/1/2010
I'm quite sad that I couldn't find this story earlier. I'm a new reader (and a new fan of yours!), but I'm already in love with the first two chapters. I don't know how the plot was originaly, but I'm so into it that lately I haven't been able to think of anything else but how the story could go on. I must say you have an incredible talent (it doesn't surprise me that you dream of becoming a published author and you seriously have all it's needed to become one) and I also appreciate you researching and laboring over the details in order to make the setting correct. It makes me all the more eager to read it. I don't know much about Saxons and old tribes, but I've been searching for stories with both this kind of setting and an intriguing plot, since I would have to make some research on Saxons eventually. So, thanks for sharing this story with us! :) And update soon!
Masquerade hide your face chapter 1 . 6/30/2010
Wow this is quite diffrent so far. I like how she didn't have to watch her mother almost gedt raped. So good, so far! chapter 2 . 6/30/2010
Woww. This is amazing! I read the previous unedited version of this story about two months ago and although I still lovelovelove it I gotta say- I enjoyed reading the original first chapter more. No idea why. But that doesn't mean I hate/am flaming/will refuse to read this. I still think you are a fab writer with a great talent and an awesome plot. It's just... I believe an honest opinion is the best advice to be given and that's mine.

Please add more!

Jainblu chapter 1 . 6/29/2010
Good Morning :)

I'm Zee, and wow.

I love your writing. I think it's very strong, well developed, and effective in drawing th reader into a 'different' reality... the reality of your characters.


I remember putting this story on alert back when it had a lot more chapters, in the hopes that i would come back and read it.

Anyway... life happened, and it was yesterday's update that brought me back here. I read teh first chapter, having read the previous chapter, and I think it's much improved.

I love it. Though i did catch one error...


I can't find it... I think i was readng it and i remember thinking, oh she's missed out the word 'one' here... but now i can't find it...


I love the lengthiness of this though. It's reall quite amazing :)

Take care


FreakByTrade chapter 2 . 6/28/2010
I love this story! Nice job on the revison! What's funny is that as I was reading this, my older brother was kidnapping my younger one and forcing him to go to a party with him. My brother ran and hid and tried to escape and my older brother kept dragging him along and hitting him as punishment. I found it ironic and amusing!
Lady R chapter 2 . 6/28/2010
Thank you for updating. This was great!
forgetmenotbutterfly chapter 1 . 6/28/2010
This was pretty much the best story ever. Now it's even better :D
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