|Reviews for My Beloved - Original, Unedited Version|
| SapphireEyes16 chapter 32 . 9/17/2009
i luved this story, but i do wish radulfr didnt hav to die he was nice to start of with and then he became really hateful so i thought that was 1 drastic character change but ur story is still in my faves so keep up the gud work! :)
| Louise chapter 32 . 9/17/2009
two thumbs isn't enough, so lets have like 8o thumbs way way up. Aesome!
| Tecna chapter 27 . 9/17/2009
Seeing as I can't post the review again for chapter 29 - epilogue, might I add, I'll post it here.
Three words: I HATE HIM!
Please put me in your story, I want to be the one to slaughter him! Honestly, that stupid, idiotic, tyrannosaurus rex!
We'll see who sneaks up on who! I'll kick him! He (Or you) does anything to Alaric or Anwen or any of their kin or children or whoever, then I think you'll have to answer to all the readers. Heh, I'd murder that guy in my dreams if I have to! You watch!
Now then... I'm looking forward to the sequel! All the best.
| Arvael chapter 29 . 9/17/2009
Hmm... I think it turned out better than the first one; this way, it's more realistic *.*
Anyway, there was also something I wanted to tell you (because of the last epilogue where Anwen's sister was around Romans): so, as far as I know Saxons first appeared around the V-VIth century in Britain, but Rome split in two in 395; the Western part (Rome) fell in 476. So, when the Saxons arrived in Britain, the empire was already in ruins, so... yeah. I just thought you'd like to know since this means they don't have that much power anymore - though I don't know exactly how much influence they had over Britain at that time.
| Arvael chapter 32 . 9/17/2009
You know, I read your story in the summer, but I didn't have an account then and since I have now, I just want to tell you, I really enjoyed it! And I also favourited the story
And I'll re-read those chapters you reposted - and I can't wait for the sequel! I'm really glad you'll write one :)
| A.Woody chapter 32 . 9/16/2009
Okay, so it wouldn't let me review the final chapter since i already did im going to review here..i liked how it was foreshadowing the next installment...and it should be unaware instead of unawares...are we supposed to re-read chapters 25-29? or just the epilouge?
| xlittleredtearx chapter 32 . 9/16/2009
Um chapter 26 and 27 are the same chapter...the fight is skipped and then the epiloge.
| Dieter Haley chapter 32 . 9/16/2009
A FREAKING SEQUEL?
i have a reason to live again!
| Lady R chapter 29 . 9/16/2009
The revised epilogue seemed a little abrupt, but it sure does leaves things open for the sequel. I can understand the changes you made to set the stage for the next installment. I am excited to see how the sequel turns out, (even if you can't promise when that will be)! :D
| Lady R chapter 32 . 9/16/2009
Ok, will do. So glad to hear about the sequel!
| Chryseida chapter 8 . 9/12/2009
A rather strange chapter to review, I admit, but I'd rather review now than not get round to it later on.
Firstly, your characters are really complex. Alaric is very intriguing and I'm very interested to see how his relationship with Anwen progresses and when he will show his nice side to her. Also his reasons for acting the way he does - i.e. he threatens her when she defies him but he doesn't want her to be submissive. I also can't wait to see what he will do in order for Anwen to forgive him for killing her family. I gather it would have to be a lot.
Secondly you seem to have researched this well. I know there are no specific details like a historian would put in, but I haven't noticed anything that sounds out of place. I don't claim to know much about this period, but I can normally see when someone deviates from a time they've set a story in - it's really awkward, and there's none of that here.
Thirdly I admire you for writing openly about your faith in a story. It's a refreshing change to today's atheist culture. Many people, even those who do believe in God, are afraid to have their characters believe in Him in case people don't like it. I particularly like the fact that Alaric doesn't believe in a God yet and Anwen does. I can see her being a sort of redemption. I love that in stories. (I'm a Christian too, if you hadn't guessed; Roman Catholic, if you're curious.)
Overall, this story is really well written, nothing / no one is superfluous and I'll definitely be reading on :)
| shutterbaby chapter 28 . 9/8/2009
The ending seemed too abrupt to me. The rest of the story progressed fairly slowly, but then suddenly there's a fight-why does the fight mean they're free? Where are they to go? What about Wieland?
| Aruka Ten chapter 31 . 8/31/2009
this was such a great story! u should really write a sequel! i would love to read about the family and what happened to them! also if Eda ever get's back to her sister, and where is she? eitherway, great stoy! :)
| JBrooke chapter 31 . 8/10/2009
I absolutely love this story. I've read it in 2 days time and have to say that it is one of the most well written and intriguing stories that I have ever read. Thank you for writing this story )
| junebird28 chapter 29 . 7/21/2009
This story was amazing! I loved reading it so much! I'm so glad my friend told me about it. I feel bad for edana, but it's your story and you are allowed to do whatever. Anwen has to be my favorite female characters in all the fictionpress stories I've read. She's very powerful and easy to respect. Great job!