|Reviews for Fading Stars|
| An Inside Joke chapter 1 . 12/16/2008
Good set up. YOu've set the world up pretty nicely, although you overplay some of the emtoions. It's unlikely that Ivo's stepfather would spell out the circumstances of his father leaving, so the exposition could come out in a different way (it didn't really have any impact on this chapter, so you could hold off on that informaiton until it's more important later on.)
You begin by discussing a bit of how fairies aren't like what people typically think, but you don't get much more detailed than that. I didn't know the narrator could turn invisible until you mentioned that she did. Likewise, I want to know more about her so I can picture her more in the story.