Wow, what an amazing story (even if you did say that the point was quantity rather than quality, I'd have to disagree). You going to continue this? ;) it'd make lotsa people happy. (your ending note actually sounded as if you were planning to revise it- y'know, writing down notes on things to improve)

If you're still accepting suggestions, Jared should be more different from James. Jared's reactions seemed like what James' would be if he were in the same situation- all intelligent, eager to keep self busy (although it seemed like Jared was more hyperactive than James- it would be nice to play that up), not really afraid. Why did Jared go after James at all- I got the impression that Jared didn't want James back after all. Likes the Edward Gorey detail.

Thanks for being a wonderful writer, by the way.

Wow! I just found this story a day ago. This is some really good stuff! I think you have a very nice writing style and the story plot is very original and interesting. Hope you decide to finish the story.

Hello! I'm just reading this again for the fourth time or so-I really like it, even if it's a little rough.

You said at the end of the last chapter to mention anything that needs fixing when/if you get around to finishing and editing it: Ynyr doesn't know about coffee when he's at James' place, but James drinks it constantly at the Maze.

Anyway, I'm a big fan of yours, and I hope you feel like writing (anything) again sometime soon-your characters always cheer me up. My friend and I tend to obsess over the God Eaters and Forge of Dawn together whenever we meet up.

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I read this last year and was just re-reading it again this year. It's quite interesting and really well written. I'm a schmuck myself when it comes to finishing projects that have been left off for a long time but I'm hoping that even if you don't plan on returning to it and writing the rest (although I do hope you will) that one day possibly you'll post your notes for it so that your adoring fan will know how this plot bunny ends. Because I'm really curious. I imagine happy endings and cake all around but at the same time dealing with demons and immortal with mortal relations it could be quite expansive. Either way, wonderful story, you're a really good writer and I hope you keep finding joy in it so that I can have the joy of reading what you write.

Ah, there goes my idea of the threesome. Oh well, I like this Eamon fellow. Also, I'm very glad James got his guitar working, it's a total bitch to be without music. Thanks for mentioning the song, I looked up 'Down in a Hole' and it's pretty good. That's the first time I'd heard it. : )

Oh, and is Jared going to be this bad guy? I'm kind of tired of the fruity goth, no offense.

Aw, tuckered out like a little puppy! I wonder how this new development of being back in Summerland and Ynyr being reunited with the General is going to play out. Hmm...

-Laughs- The way he says that; "Oh. Yes. Of course." is such a placating sentence. I loved it! This Ynyr is interesting. I like his brand of selfishness. Oh, and I have absolutely no idea how to pronounce his name. : ( Boo.

Aw, hell yes! This chapter is great. I'm looking forward to reading more about what's going on. I want to know if James takes all the iron out of his house, and how he's going to deal with him in the morning. I love the way Ynyr speaks, especially that last sentence. I feel better now that I think Ynyr is going to get over his general and that T-whatchamacallit isn't coming to get him. Does that make me evil? No, that makes me a fan.

I admit, I was a bit confused when you made the switch to our world. And I was depressed about this T guy, the general, and how he'd lost Lyn. But when everything cam together there at the end, a light dawned, and I realized just how clever you are. Seriously, how did you come up with that!

Though I'm tempted to tease you and tell you 'Well, it feels like a rough draft...' it honestly wasn't that rough of a read. I don't remember encountering and catches, and I thought everything was imaginative and different from the norm. I'm looking forward to reading more!

Oh, sorry I couldn't offer and constructive criticism. It was hard to find it in this story.

I was going to use this review to bitch you out for leaving this incomplete until I looked at your profile and realized you're the dude from Metanoia. Now I can't. Dammit.

Um yeah, so if you aren't completely off this story, I hope you're planning on coming back to it at some time. If not, I enjoyed what you wrote so far and will happily create an ending that will be completely off base and horrid compared to yours.

You know I've said it before - I love your work. Just read Jack Saturday and seeing as that isn't complete I jumped straight into Summerlands. Sigh. Anyway, I wanted to say how enjoyable this story is: I echo another reviewer in saying I am a sucker for elven/fae & the modern world interacting. Could also echo some other comments but no need to as I am sure you will take them on board or discard as you see fit. But I think it bears repeating that James, great character as he comes to be, doesn't show that promise when we first meet him. It's all a bit chaotic in the early parts, and he comes across as rather self-pitying and slightly masochistic. Then he gains great strengths of intellect, commonse-sense and a get-the-job-done attitude, none of which were especially evident in the begining.

Was a bit bored with the Jared stuff, but actually grew to enjoy them - think it may just be in the wrong place in the story. Adore Eamon, very well drawn and interesting character, plus very much admire the way you have let their relationship grow without interrupting the story. **Really** admire Tarlach, like his devious yet straight-forward mind. Missing Ynyr, but guess we'll see him come into his own later on. Do hope you continue with this as it's such a well-developed world and characters. I bought Godeaters cos I loved it so much from the net, and have been lending it around. Thanks for sharing your talent with us.

I felt like clapping during this ending scene! Awesome how he just took control like that. Also, this story has me hacking up a gut every five minuets from laughing. I love your work so much and am planing to buy "The Godeaters" (is that even in print) Just to have it on display in my room.

Really like this story so far, hope you plan to continue it.

I couldn't bring myself to care about Jared, however. The chapters about him were tedious and boring. I finally just skipped the bulk of them. Perhaps as you continue the story, they will seem more important, but now they feel rather arbitrary and meaningless.

Very much looking forward to reading more about James, however. Hope you plan to update soon.

This is one of my favorite stories. Ever. Starhands is a bit better. I, and likely many other people, would love to see a new chapter ) Perhaps get a look at Tarlach's attacks from the fort's pov? Maybe their families noted their absences? A scene or two of how Ynyr's sister is trying to save face/ manage her end of the war? More James and Eamon love? Does James' music effect all elves that way? what does the monster man do with Jared? how will the humans participate in the up-coming battles? Will they use guerrilla tactics? Do we get to see Ynyr use earth magics? Does he face off with his sister? Why do the monster man and the lord-guy share hearts? Does that Three have any interest in this rebellion? Does Jared free Day? Or does he find someway to bind M M? If their from the same world, perhaps Jared has some advantage others from summerland don't have. It would be supper fantastic if there were eventual plans in the works to at some point continue writing this. Eventually. If you have time. No rush. Just, you know, no sense in abandoning a perfectly good story. It's a little rough around the edges, but the creativity and life of the story is pretty sound.

I do like this story a great deal, as I said in a review earlier. (Although now I'm paying for it, because wow did I not get enough sleep.) One thing, in this particular chapter, though, James tells the human deligation that he'll only meet with them after he's received a written letter of intent. Jeeves mentioned earlier that it's illegal for humans to be literate. Was James just sick and tired and not thinking it through or was he being intentionally difficult. It seemed unlike him.