Reviews for Ice
DiaRose chapter 1 . 1/14/2009
BEAUTIFUL ending! Really flawless ending! I LOVE IT. The rest of the poem is good, but not perfect. If you could build the metaphor more individually throughout... what I mean is the ice metaphor is pretty common, and some of the lines you used are similar to a lot of pieces I've read. If you can perfect that aspect of your writing, it will be amazing all around!


MissMelodie chapter 1 . 1/9/2009
that sounds kind of sad..

adding punctuation helps the poem flow better
Mirrors Lie chapter 1 . 1/9/2009
Wow, i really like this poem.

it made me feel cold.


great job.
BoReD tO dEaTh chapter 1 . 12/16/2008
it's good. i have had that feeling before (it being like -20 degrees is acutally)