Reviews for Kastor Chronicles 1: The Forge of Dawn
donnedid chapter 12 . 6/22/2012
Ah god. This was. Garrr. I vaguely spoiled the end for myself by accident when I read some comments on goodreads, but I still wasn't prepared for... you know what you did. Sigh. I am torn between wanting to continue onto the next installment of this series and... not. Because Kastor and Mikah felt like the driving heart of this story, and without Mikah... Ahhhhhhh. I understand the whys for it and all, but damn if that doesn't make the ache worse. Or better. Or something. You're so good at constructing these worlds and characters, and making it all personal and felt. It's like you're TOO good. Guh. I'm going to go stumble away now. I'm barely coherent, I apologize, it's all your fault. This was an amazing story that I will not be able to lift myself out from for some time. Nor do I really want to. I think. Ok. Stumbling away now.
SJR chapter 1 . 6/19/2012
You have this way of scattering your chapters with sentences worded in the most perfect way:

'Instead he behaved as if he'd been forced to do something shameful. She liked him more, for that.'

'I'm telling you now, it's something you just don't do. I advise you to take a motherfucking lesson and leave.'

etc... As someone who writes as well, I cannot read those lines (and the others) without smiling. They make me oddly jealous XD but I still just get so much pleasure from them.

I also want to talk about your characteriation. But I can't, I don't quite have the words. It is as though all your characters spring to life fully formed and 3 dimensional. Kastor, in particular, was not what I had expected from the summary, and yet by the end of a single chapter, I feel as though I've brushed up on so many conflicting aspects of his personality, and none of them in as much detail as I want. I have to find out his story, I just have to.

Finally, because you requested specifically criticism, I'll point out the one and only section that jarred:

'Compared to the weather he'd grown up with on the high plains, early spring in Semnia was balmy.' and to the end of the paragraph.

It just felt wrong to have a description on the weather so early on in the tale; if I hadn't already known how great an author you are, I might even have been dissuaded as that. I don't know, it IS just my opinion, but that kind of a description in an opening sequence seems to just slow everything down a little too much. And I'm British, so if I couldn't hack weather talk, there had to be something wrong :P

I feel a bitch of a bitch pointing out such niggly details, and tbh, if you were any worse of a writer, I wouldn't even think about it. So ignore if you will; you honestly only deserve praise for a chapter like this one, and reams of it at that.
CalliScribbles chapter 12 . 4/4/2012
Awww. *Sniffles*

Only twelve chapters and yet everyone has changed so much... you know, I didn't like Mikah at the beginning, and now I do. Also, you've successfully eaten up my morning. :)
CalliScribbles chapter 6 . 4/3/2012
Finally, a story! And one with plot and many characters and where the romance/confused romantic relations is well paced and doesn't eat the plot!

By the way, all of your "qotation marks" in chapter five have been turned into capital O's with accents, as have all of the um... these: '. (They have a name, but I am too lazy to look it up right now.)

Also, wow with the plot twist with Kastor's son. That's gotta be a hell of a complicated life.
PlusEncore chapter 12 . 2/26/2012
beautiful
Starcrazed chapter 12 . 10/25/2011
Love it~!
FamishedNight chapter 12 . 10/24/2011
Amazing story! Awesome characters! I Luv It!
The Ouch chapter 12 . 10/11/2011
Bawling. Seriously amazing.
please chapter 6 . 8/26/2011
Please fix the text in this chapter :)
Disney Is Hardcore chapter 6 . 7/22/2011
Ah; some backstory! I don't know what I was expecting, but a crippled son would not have been it. And he's the husband of the queen.

Everything seems so unexplained and unconnected- such as the world's worst wizard who used to be a dignitary and the odd books. It's hard to see how everything will connect, but then you offer this backstory and everything suddenly clicks into place. But not yet, clearly...

In this chapter, all the apostrophes have turned into Õ s.
pille-ip chapter 12 . 6/20/2011
This has been an amazing piece of reading. Now that I finished it, I'm feeling like a kid during christmas after opening the desired present - sort of accomplished, happy and content. Yet knowing that there's sequel I'm also sort of excited like I'm about to open the next amazing present. I hope by analogy I can convey my meaning for I'm a bit in loss of words, at least in English and rather try to explain the emotional charge I got from reading this story.
julesjulianne chapter 12 . 6/5/2011
oh. oh damn. The ending is so perfect; I feel miserable, but at the same time it's fine as it is. I want it to be undone, I want Mikah to somehow come back, but the way you've written it it seems like that won't happen and I'm glad you don't leave that doubt. I also like how Stiaan isn't suddenly Mikah reborn, and that Kastor doesn't together with him and somehow find Mikah through that. It makes me sad that he's lost so much, yet where he is now it's all right. I like reading happy endings, but this one is perfect as it is. I'm glad you haven't written it any way else.
i-wish-i-had-wings chapter 12 . 5/16/2011
this story was AMAZING! it really sucked me in and i'm so happy it's different from the other slash, you get a bit bored xD it helped that it was fantasy ;)

i loved the way it ended, really sad, but beautiful. i managed not to cry during reading it, but it got me.. i got sadder and sadder and when i was going to bed i had a good little bawl, lol.

what saddened me wasn't that they didn't get each other, no that would've been ok. anyone dying would have been awful but still ok..but mikah didn't die, he gave up himself, his BEING and that got to me! if you die you've at least owned your life, but he gave that up, forgot everything he's ever been. i'm sure kastor will be ok and i'm going to start reading number two now! thank you for sharing this 3
Kariz chapter 1 . 5/7/2011
Do you ever intend to publish this series? I would actually love to see these published so I could freaking BUY them and support you! They would be the kind of books I'd be terrified of bending the spine, but I would've read it so many times it would be useless in the end. It'd be one of those lovely books that have been thumbed through way too many times. Seriously, Kastor's Chronicles is better than a lot of of published crap out there.

Your writing is so beautiful and I loved the journey it took me on. I read some reviews that had some minor complaints, like I think one said the characters were a bit bland or... something like that? I think the thing is, everyone is bound to have different types of stories they like. This just happens to be my ideal story. It's pretty much one of my top favourites, so, thank you so much for creating something so beautiful and posting it online.

I'm sorry I keep describing it as beautiful, but it really is! It's literally perfection. I actually can't handle character deaths. I never liked stories that had unresolved angst. I especially hate stories that spend 99% of it developing the romance and plot, and suddenly BAM! In the last 1% of the story, one of them dies. But this was just... it blew my mind.

Anyway, this is my second time reading it, but I stopped myself at chapter 10. Only because I didn't think I could handle falling apart all over again :( Not right now at least. I'll leave the hauntingly beautiful ending for after my exams.

I'm shocked as hell that your reviews aren't well over 500! But then I suppose I'm guilty of being one of those silent lurkers :S I will try harder to review more diligently!
Byrdsquirrel chapter 12 . 3/29/2011
Well written with interesting characters and a unique quest. And its SLASH! Gasp! You broke all the gay fiction rules and made it good! How dare you! Honestly though, this is awesome. I would actually pay money to read this. Much better than most of the crap I've bought in a book store recently.
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