Wow, this was intense! I mean it started out simply and then as the story progressed, it just got creepier and the end was really something.

I don't know if I understood it correctly but I think, or the way I see it, Zachary was able to get the soul or at least a part of one's soul once he was able to paint the model? And that's when they start to get obsessed with him? Somehow, his previous models were easy to prey on.

But with Cynthia, he was not able to do this easily. Although he did succeed in affecting Cynthia, it was not in just a love-lust way because he was able to evoke feelings of anger, hatred and resentment in her.

And I think it was these feelings of Cynthia which led to his demise. Maybe the drawings he made had power. What he drew represents what he took from the models but with Cynthia, it represented what Cynthia took from him.

I don't know if I'm making sense... hahahaha! It's just how I see and understood the story.

wOnDeRfUL

nice

wow, this was just PERFECT! so dark and vague, really beautiful. i bet i'll be thinking about this for quite a while xD

In so many ways the story was quite chilling.

But at the same time, was confusing at the end.

None-the-less, I liked the fast pace and sharp details.

Very well cone.

So freakin' awesome. I loves yous. Thanks.

this story is creepy in good way

:D

Crepy... I've got the chills!

And I'll never look at those artsy college boys the same way.

You must realize that if anyone ever uses that "Let me draw you" line on my I'll go screeming out the nearest window head first.

I'll definately re-read this for Halloween.

Also, I might recomend that a friend uses this as a part of her Supernatural fanfic collection, it seems their speed.

I'll make sure she credits you though!

Thanks for the heebie jeebies!

amazing. So fucking fantastic. Zachary reminded me of an essay I read on street giggilos and their ability to obtain an almost natural sexual (yet heartbreakingly cold) atmosphere. It's chilling and scary, I love it. I'm kind of frustrated because I'm not entirely sure what happened to him at the end (if you could reply and clear the up I would really happy!).

Amazing insight into this crooked situation you've created!

First time I read this was on another/your website a while ago, and I still remember it. Beautiful and amazing story. Need to re-read it. I love the narration and descriptions, they're captivating.

What an interesting story. I don't know if it's my propensity to be slow to catch onto things (I think I just like to savor, but I could be dense) but I was delightfully surprised at the ending and her painting. In a way you're the perfect artist who painted this story with enough detail to be intriguing but without certain defined lines so that it's mysterious and in this case dark.

The thing that really captured me in this story is the expectations. Whatever you thought, as a reader, was going to happen, in a way, did, but on a slightly varying course that left you wondering. For instance, if your idea was a line on a graph and what really happens in your story is another line; they are neither parallel nor perpendicular, but one of the many possibilities in between. You'll have to forgive me, I've been cramming a summer math course and I keep making these kind of parallels. Pun intended.

I, of course, admire your use of language in this story. Your imagery is startling, stark and fully beautiful at the same time. You've created a pentagram of your story, and it's incredible.

Thank you for posting, and I'm sorry I can't offer you any of the constructive criticism you want. You haven't really given me the opening.

this was an amazing story! i cried when Jon died :( but I've figured it out :D its their souls MWHAHA! lol creepy love it!

Very very awesome story! OMG I love it. Very beautifully written and very mystifying... I've always thought some paintings seem like they're alive. Kinda like the photographing your soul idea... love it.

Wow. This is amazing. It's... gorgeous, just gorgeous.

Wow, this is a fantastic story. Extremely well written. There's enough mystery to make you think about the story after you've finished reading it, and enough answers to be satisfied. Zachary is so creepy, and as I read more and more about Cynthia, I found her very creepy as well in her coldness.

Excellent work! I greatly enjoyed it.