Wow. A masterpiece.

hey! I really liked your story and I thought the way it was told enhanced it all very nicely. I particularly appreciated your delicate descriptions and the way you created a very sharp and precise atmosphere in just a few sentences. The plot itself is also fascinating, and you've managed to keep the suspense going nicely.

The one thing that I thought was a wee bit strange was the ending. For a start, I didn't really get it (but then again, that might be saying more about me than about your text I guess...). But I also felt that it came across as a little rushed - as though you'd suddenly gotten bored with the story and decided to end it abruptly... Even if it's not the case, maybe reworking it a little so that it fits better with the rest of the writing would be worth your while?

xx

Incredible; you've got a really keen eye for the subtlety of the strange and the insane. Surprised this doesn't have more reviews. Probably my second favorite piece after Zachary.

nice dialogue C :

Very strange O_O

But well written and creative all the same. Interesting read.

Oh god, I love this. You are amazing ;-;

asdjhk I'm trying to explain why I like this so much, you know, the descriptions, way you phrase everything, the pace of the story how it's so nicely done, but aha, I'd be listing everything.

I like this one! But in Cold Iron, Jedrah is blond.

Wow.

The kids are mysterious and complete at the same time. The wizard will probably be after him again, but Jedrah is a smart kid. The clock might take some fixing. I doubt the enemy is simply going to pack up and go home now that the plot is foiled, but I chose to believe they will eventually.

It's very nice.

Good to see this character again. I kind of miss Cold Iron.

Anyway, please keep up the good work. :)

This story rocks. I always love the crazy/off kilter characters, and you pulled him off perfectly. I didn't get the last couple lines, but I love the story anyways. Keep up the good work.

Wow. I don't think I've read a piece of prose as elegantly eerie and beautiful as that since Frankenstein, which is entirely complimentary by the way. I was mesmerised all the way through, it's almost impossibly brilliant

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