|Reviews for Sad Moments|
| Earl Chapwin chapter 1 . 1/6/2009
Wow, this was soo emo.
You don't even have English as your native language, yet you know more interesting words than I do.
Makes me feel sad.
| Predestined-Fate chapter 1 . 12/19/2008
Great attempt at rhyming! I can't even do one...Surprised you can even write one that long. I can never manage to get past the fourth line
Anyway, you have little to no spelling mistakes and i think the splotchy grammer is only because it's a poem.
I'll just point out a few things i had trouble with. I'm not 'english' so you can ignore me if you want;;
'how could we all have been so narrow?' Did you perhaps mean narrow-minded?
'Our minds that HAD once been one.' -simple mistake that..i always do it.-_-''
and this bit. 'not once but twice you ignored my please'. i guess i didn't know what to do with it. having 'please' there instead of 'pleas' which is usually used,..i dunno, added to the..realism?
Basically i like it either way. I just thought it was rather unique. i'm wierd,..i know XD
and one last note-sorry will stop soon- i really really like this bit...
'not once but twice you ignored my please,
not twice but thrice i regretted my appease'
lovely, simply lovely!
*starts clapping but then is kicked out*