Reviews for Have you noticed at all?
Sushi chapter 1 . 10/28/2009
I've actually noticed this stuff. I notice a lot. Usually anyway, when I've got a migraine or my head is stuffed with my allergy medicine I don't...
Chasing Skylines chapter 1 . 2/15/2009
Form/Structure

Beatles, I suggest you do the 'shift enter' thing to create this as a stanza, and you know, center it or something. It makes it more a poem and not a wall of text.

I honestly don't have enough knowledge of poems to correct you on this, but free verse is allowed to not have ending punctuation, right? Each line's first word is capitalized, but no periods, and no commas. Get what I'm saying? Wait, something else; I think you should also, after you turn this into stanzas, have three stanzas, one for each line that said 'Have you noticed at all.'

Example:

[Have you noticed at all

When you look at those around you

That sexuality

Is only hated by those

Too afraid to admit their own weakness’

-space, new stanza begins after this-

Have you noticed at all

When you look at those around you

That being poetic

Is all too often hidden

Because we are afraid to share our hearts]

[Too afraid to admit their own weakness’]

The apostrophe means it's possessive form. I think you meant 'weaknesses.'
heartbroken922 chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
i love the last part. its so true. anyway, this is well written. great job.